Description: the first paragraph is mine and the second is skillz....just a short rap made in like two minutes but like typed in five
them against us... -------------------------------------------
just another wannabe
tryna go against me
but your lyrics ain't shit
you fuckin little flea
Shocking harder than a live wire
with a virus of hate
spreading faster than a forest fire
go ahead pretend your great
your offensive ain't no good against a bullet
I'll reach into your mouth grab your larynx and pull it
cause I don't wanna hear your voice no more
you make my eardrums sore
I'll strike you down with the hammer of Thor
but you imitate my real estate
and replicate my every mode
to sync in code with Santo will make your head explode
*pop*
like a mutha fuckin Zit
Come on King Rapper Delight mutha fuck YOUAIN'TSHIT
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when darkness consumes you, you feel the cold
shivering with your bling just before you fold
behold
the spotlight is shining upon you
while you holding the microphone you're whining on too
you little bitch
you ain't dealing with the Lich
I'm gonna turn you life off like it was a light switch
your intellegence reflects the way you write a rap
and your arrogance shows your mind's as slow as tree sap
you're just a crack head, half dead cocaine freak
that injects heroin right into his left butt cheek
do me a favor before you kick another rhyme
wash yourself up and finish doing your time
and after jail hit me up and I'll teach you to rap
you could be another Head Bussa...now how about that
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Seems to be typical rap metaphors and nonsensical imagery, riddled with glaring spelling mistakes and grammatical errors. There is also cursing for cursing's sake.
"your intellegence reflects the way you write a rap" I found that funny.
You could sum up your lyrics in one line: "I'm better than you at rapping." ...Except you extend its length with metaphors that don't make sense in the context of your lyrics.
Try to think of a consistent theme throughout the lyrics, and stop cursing just because.
It seems that all you want is violence against violence. Learn acceptance rap about how to change the world not just switch problems, I can write rap music too, I'll put one of my songs on here, i wouldn't call it rap thoguh because the msuic that goes to it is an acoustic guitar, it's called "Testimony" I'll put it on tonight but if you want to get the feel for it listen to music by Mat Kearney it's his style completely Anyway you can flow but like I said, listen to yourself and realize how violent that is, and check out the show "Def jam Poetry" I think you would like it but hip hop my friend isn't what the media tells you search deeper and find your origininality don't impersonate what your saying you hate.
Hehehe, I'm impressed. I have to admit, I don't know much about rap besides the music my brother enjoys listening to. Some of these rappers who recently emerged on thescene don't really have any substance or wit to their lyrics, but I thought yours was good. Although, the whole 'my rhymes are better than yours'does tend to be over-used. However, both verses was completely different. I'd have to say I enjoyed the second verse more, especially the first two lines. I hope you continue to rap.
Submission Name: them against us...
