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them against us...


Author: Lil_Santo
ASL Info:    19=I
Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 34 /52 /15
Words: 252
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the first paragraph is mine and the second is skillz....just a short rap made in like two minutes but like typed in five


them against us...



just another wannabe
tryna go against me
but your lyrics ain't shit
you fuckin little flea
Shocking harder than a live wire
with a virus of hate
spreading faster than a forest fire
go ahead pretend your great
your offensive ain't no good against a bullet
I'll reach into your mouth grab your larynx and pull it
cause I don't wanna hear your voice no more
you make my eardrums sore
I'll strike you down with the hammer of Thor
but you imitate my real estate
and replicate my every mode
to sync in code with Santo will make your head explode
*pop*
like a mutha fuckin Zit
Come on King Rapper Delight mutha fuck YOUAIN'TSHIT

~~~~~~~~~~~

when darkness consumes you, you feel the cold
shivering with your bling just before you fold
behold
the spotlight is shining upon you
while you holding the microphone you're whining on too
you little bitch
you ain't dealing with the Lich
I'm gonna turn you life off like it was a light switch
your intellegence reflects the way you write a rap
and your arrogance shows your mind's as slow as tree sap
you're just a crack head, half dead cocaine freak
that injects heroin right into his left butt cheek
do me a favor before you kick another rhyme
wash yourself up and finish doing your time
and after jail hit me up and I'll teach you to rap
you could be another Head Bussa...now how about that
~~~~~~~~~~




Submitted on 2005-03-26 00:26:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by PalmyNv | [ Reply to This ]
  It seems that all you want is violence against violence. Learn acceptance rap about how to change the world not just switch problems, I can write rap music too, I'll put one of my songs on here, i wouldn't call it rap thoguh because the msuic that goes to it is an acoustic guitar, it's called "Testimony" I'll put it on tonight but if you want to get the feel for it listen to music by Mat Kearney it's his style completely
Anyway you can flow but like I said, listen to yourself and realize how violent that is, and check out the show "Def jam Poetry" I think you would like it but hip hop my friend isn't what the media tells you search deeper and find your origininality don't impersonate what your saying you hate.
| Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
  Hehehe, I'm impressed.
I have to admit, I don't know much about rap besides the music my brother enjoys listening to. Some of these rappers who recently emerged on thescene don't really have any substance or wit to their lyrics, but I thought yours was good. Although, the whole 'my rhymes are better than yours'does tend to be over-used. However, both verses was completely different. I'd have to say I enjoyed the second verse more, especially the first two lines.
I hope you continue to rap.

-Leila.
| Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by Leila | [ Reply to This ]


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