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    dots Submission Name: A Wishful Love Poemdots
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    Author: edthepoet
    ASL Info:    47-m-Pa
    Elite Ratio:    4.72 - 1476/991/125
    Words: 1849
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       This is a very long poem, because love means so much to me, not just physically,but spiritually as well.

    Too often we write short poems to capture love, with this poem.I wanted to explore more of what love truly is and should be. Knowing full well, I will miss many great elements of what love is. Love is pure and unending contrast with how we believe we can naively control it.

    Love has no beginning and no ending, that is the flaws of humans staining it.

    This not about my ex-wife, rather all my expericences with love, observing other couples and from reading other people poetry.


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    A WISHFUL LOVE POEM


    You entered my life like a gentle sigh,
    like a quiet breeze blowing softly through the leaves.
    You were a stranger first, one who laughed freely and
    easily.

    Hidden amongst your stormy clouds was my love for you. Blowing
    softly, while caressing your heart with silent gestures,
    never knowing which way the winds of passion would sail.

    When you spoke of minor intimacies and common ground,
    you became my friend, no longer a stranger,
    trusting you with secrets hidden,
    confiding in what we liked and hated.
    As we talked and laughed and as time passed by,
    I grew more and more dependent upon your smile.

    I am the warm blanket on the cold nights
    I am the answer that calms your anxieties
    I am the critic that understand the abstract you

    From strangers to friends was just a baby step,
    a stride, and a leap of faith, I would have never taken.
    Without your trust and yearning to gently take down each
    brick of my wall, then lovingly reusing them to strengthen
    our foundation and without your smiles and encouraging gaze,
    I would never have taken the step beyond.
    Your gentle breeze kept blowing through minor cracks in my walls, so
    relentlessly, yet the spiritual breeze somehow sealed the holes.

    Trust unlocked the fears, while setting aside your past
    tears with compassion and understanding.
    We were never strangers, only shadows that didn't
    see each otherís light.

    We traveled far along the path of friendship,
    avoiding the bumps somehow, never stumbling,
    always in step with one anotherís adventurous rhythms.
    You are the unfailing light that lit the corridor before us.
    Hand in hand, lips to lips, and soul to soul, you have taken us to
    a destination I had never seen before.

    A road of true support has no bumps, only life obstacles
    that all couples must face.
    Without our communication skills,
    we shall fail ourselves and God too; In life we choose the path with our freewill, though sometimes we mistakenly take another person path because we havenít found the courage to explore our own path.
    until we hit the dead end with our lifeless brakes.

    Regrets seem to void all futures, not to mention a murderous
    effect on your upcoming dreams. Living a lie canít ever bring forth
    love, only deaden your self-worth.

    Though we are so very different, you and I,
    our differences merge with our similarities and
    give rise to something special and unique.

    What I value most is the way we talk about anything, anytime
    anywhere, yet each time I listen to you,
    I pondered what you have said and what you havenít said,
    learning to understand the silent words of your inflections, as well.

    I've learned to trust in your instincts and mine too,
    without the conflict of misunderstanding.

    We reflect our passions in the same way, breaking all
    the rules of society with the confidence of Zeus.
    We are pattern less and direction-less, unless we trust our
    God given instincts to guide us to a place where others have forgotten:
    We shall pay a heavy price by their standards and receive
    a treasure that outweighs the value of gold.

    I love the vitality and zest that is so much a part of you and
    those flashing flares of fire that animates all that you do.
    It's easy to see how much you love life,
    even when life is sometimes less than lovable,
    and that love is always mirrored in your eyes and
    smile.
    You are so beautiful when that spark ignites the
    vitality that blazes in your happy face.

    When two matches catch fire, the warmth lasts longer
    and the adoring light shines brighter, thus even
    the blind can see the sparks.

    You know its real love, when someone dares to study
    the object of their desire, so that they can enhance
    their life without strings.
    Darling, I love that you took the time to find my light,
    my details and all that I am.

    Our trust started as a small seed, I think,
    a tentative whisper of unearned confidence,
    often shrouded by a cloak of hesitation and fear of the unknown.
    I could always tell when you faltered,
    when the steps we took were uncertain and questioned.
    And yet, we still trusted each other
    with our secrets and with our feelings.

    Though the world needs a combination to find your
    hidden secrets, your vault of unconditional trust was
    always set for a soul mate to be.

    The strength of our foundation allows for imperfections, mistakes,
    and for bad days that always seems to come.
    We donít seek perfection, but respect, compassion, and understanding
    on those days, as well.

    It's uncanny sometimes how well you know my thoughts,
    my feelings, my moods, and sometimes frightening how closely our lives
    have become interlinked.

    You know so much of me, secrets I've never told,
    thoughts I've never shared, parts of me I've never seen myself.
    You've discovered a window into my being,
    a window I didn't know was there,
    a window no one else has ever found.
    It's almost as if our two souls have merged into one,
    almost as if the hand of God has repaired that which
    once was broken.

    In your endless search for true love, you left the
    window to your heart open slightly, hoping someday a
    soft breeze shall find its way in. Sometimes the wind
    came in the wrong direction and blew sand in your eyes.
    Then one day, an unexpected swirling wind began clearing your
    eyes and comforting your past pain with a subtle touch.
    Yes, yes, yes, this is the hand of God waving his approval of us.
    Though He moved his hand only slightly, the world cleared the way for
    his will. For that is why I raise my fingers in glory to
    him and why God is my savior and my hero.

    Sometimes the words that are already expressed need no
    comment, only continued yearning and effort.

    Your life has touched mine in ways you cannot fathom
    and I could never describe in depth.
    The gentle breeze, blowing softly through the leaves,
    has worked his wondrous magic,
    transforming the one he touched.
    I'm not the same person I was a year ago.
    I will never be that person again.

    In the short time of knowing you time, I grew a lifetime,
    learning about you.
    You are inspiring in the way you love and in your zest for
    life. If you were to have stayed the person as we first met, then I
    would have failed you and myself. The evolution of our enthusiasm
    has brought forth a wondrous creation in the way we speak
    and treat each other with respect.

    It is true; I purposely raised the bar of open
    communication to eliminate all others, but not with the
    intention to hurt you or control you, only to show that
    the bar has no limits. We, as humans, knock the bar down
    to adjust it to our own selfish level. Joy, fun and
    laughter is the tools we all need to survive. You, my
    darling, have an abundance of these qualities and love
    to share it. This enthusiasm makes me light up like a
    Christmas tree.

    As much as you've altered my present though,
    the effect you've had on my future is just as great.
    I once thought I knew what love meant to me,
    once thought I had experienced all that life had to
    offer.
    I lived and I loved, and I hurt and I grew,
    and I believed I could never love again,
    could never willingly face the pain of caring.
    Love was a myth, I thought, true love, lasting love,
    was just a lie recited by poets and dreamers?
    but I was wrong.

    Because I write from instincts and feelings, my poetry
    never lies, sometimes it brings happiness, tears and
    provocative thoughts.

    I love the wisdom you had and the ultimate respect
    toward listening or reading anything I ever
    said. Not to mention having the guts to question
    things when I was wrong, or when you didn't quite
    understand the meaning of what I said.

    In learning to love you, I discovered I've never loved
    before.
    Not truly. Not entirely. Not eternally.
    I've spent much of my life in love with love,
    searching for the fulfillment of a concept,
    I confused lust with love, intimacy with affection.
    And when those feelings waned, when the relationships
    died, I wondered why I felt so empty, so hurt.
    You changed that, as you've changed so much else.
    You taught me how to love.

    My only wish now is that you continue to leave the
    windows open for me.

    EDWARD KEITH DEPUTY 2002
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      This was rather long.....but when infinite love is reached...I don't think a poem can be long enough to describe them exact emotions.

    I loved the line.

    we are just shadows that didn't see each others light.

    That right there made me melt.

    Love is a glorious thing....but when true love is met.....you can never truly put into words the exact way that you feel....the depths of love are depths that can never be reached. that is when your emotions have no boundaries and all is open.

    I think that this was very heartfelt and I was overwhelmed with the power of this.

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed it, but it was a bit wordy. Granted, the words rang true to me, and I enjoyed it, but others may tire of reading it. I really really LOVED the line "We were never strangers, only shadows that didn't see each other&#8217;s light." How true that is. It's exactly how I feel about my boyfriend. Great lines and good overall theme and it is very eloquent, I only suggest you cut down on the length of your lines. :^)
    | Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by JAvery | [ Reply to This ]
      some that are this long can lose there spark and flow as they get nearer the end.this was absolutely beautiful.i dont think i could add to anything most people have already written about it,but as im new here and its the first time ive seen it i just had to say how much i appreciated reading it.truely marvellous!i will read some more of your work now.this has left me breathless lol
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by gd66uk | [ Reply to This ]
      In learning to love you, I discovered I've never loved before.
    Not truly. Not entirely. Not eternally.
    I've spent much of my life in love with love,
    searching for the fulfillment of a concept,
    I confused lust with love, intimacy with affection.
    And when those feelings waned, when the relationships
    died, I wondered why I felt so empty, so hurt.
    You changed that, as you've changed so much else.
    You taught me how to love.

    all i can say is wow, you have great insight and you know how to convey them into words. there were many concepts in this piece that i could say "i can relate to that," or "i was thinking/feeling that" but these last lines just got to me. up until these past few years, i thought this way: I've spent much of my life in love with love,
    searching for the fulfillment of a concept,
    I confused lust with love, intimacy with affection...until my - i guess you can call him my Mr. Right - came along and changed everything for me. Baby, you really did teach me how to love, thank you.

    beautiful poem, edthepoet
    dylanpoe's girl
    | Posted on 2005-07-24 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Ed.. You are so amazing.. I love this write and it was so beautiful. One day you should show your kids all your writings.. They have to see them... They are something that know words to describe.. Truely amazing..
    Love is easily described, or so it may seems.. But this is the best that I have ever seen..

    Really! Didn't you get some of your stuff published... ??
    I mean, you should put all your poems, that you ever wrote on elite, and publish them in a book... I think I already asked you that...

    But all I can say is AMAZING...

    I hope I can reach somewhere, where you are with your writings..
    But thats just hoping...
    Also one question, do you have kids, and if so did you ever show them any or your writes..
    | Posted on 2005-04-03 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      Always spittin' em out Ed. Seriosulsy, you should buy a book with your work in it. Believe me, I would buy it, and probably many others would too!
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by Chicool2 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is magic! the ability to love this deep and strong is a true gift. many people never even give it a chance and lock themselves tightly against the opportunities that come their way.

    if anyone deserves happiness i believe that is you. with your beautiful heart and everlasting hope through EVERYTHING i believe that you are now finally being rewarded with the love of your life for the tremendous faith you have shown. i applaud your piece,and your love...she is indeed a truely blessed individual!
    -Nikki
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this was something else! I could only hope to find a guy that would write me one fifth of this! your wife is a lucky, lucky person! this was absolutely beautiful. so full of emotion and images of closeness. I am astounded at your plain way of saying the most wonderful things! and you are a very blessed person to have found this kind of love. excellent poem. thanks for writing it!
    | Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      next time I find myself in a realtionship where love is waiting to be discovered, I am going to send him to this poem. If he understands have of what you've expressed, and is willing to work on living life this way, then, well he'll be the one. Thank you for sharing this... going in to my list of favorites.
    | Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      "We were never strangers,
    only shadows that didn't
    see each otherís light"
    These must be the most beautiful lines I've ever read. Your entire poem is an absolute masterpiece and speaks of such depth and knowledge, wisdom and care... that it might be overlooked by someone not willing to spend the necessary time on each word, line, phrase and nuance. Intensely personal and vibrantly human. Exceptional writing edthepoet... I am in awe.
    | Posted on 2005-03-27 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
      I've already told you my thoughts on this poem, Ed, and if anything, each reading of it is better than the last.
    I'm adding it to my favs so I can find it easily,
    when I want to read it again.
    | Posted on 2005-03-27 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      Ed, this is so beautiful. This is one extremely fortunate woman. And I'm sure she knows it.
    I love the way you did this. With the gentle breeze taking us from meeting all the way through to permanent unending love. We've all faltered in love before as you mention, and then finally, does not only the right one come along, but we've grown enough to finally realize what is most important in a relationship.
    Mutual trust, respect, feeling free to question what we dont understand, and so many more things. Your spirituality plays a very important part in your life and your not ashamed or embarassed to write about it. And I think the changes you speak about, probably were changes she also experienced. I am sure her windows will always be open. Thanks so this awe inspiring write.
    Carol
    | Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I had to get another cup of coffee for this one.. lol. It was long, but beautiful. Tons of emotion show throughout these lines. Love, acceptance, sharing, giving, understanding..etc. But then, that IS love.
    One is lucky and blessed to find such love, even once in this lifetime.
    I won't even begin to critque on any of this..not that I could.
    Thanks for sharing your heart with us in this poem.

    Have a beautiful day!

    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]


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