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    dots Submission Name: Searching For A Fairytaledots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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       I had just finished reading Alice in Wonderland, and Through the Looking Glass and I decided to write my boyfriend a poem.This is my first poem on this site so be nice.

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    dotsSearching For A Fairytaledots

    I feel like falling fast asleep
    and not waking up
    until my prince returns to me
    and swiftly fills my cup
    with laughter and smiles
    kisses and a gentle caress
    and all those little things I miss
    the things that only he does the best
    I feel like falling down a hole
    and arriving in wonderland
    fields full of "bread and butter" flies
    little white gloves for a rabbits hands
    arguing with a Mad Hatter
    Over where to sit for tea
    being ridiculed by a chesire cat
    with only nonsense for me
    I feel like falling hopelessly in love
    and dancing the night away
    feeling beautiful in my glass slippers
    and returning the very next day
    to my reality of hardship and toil
    dreaming of my fairytale
    where my prince charming has a magic carpet
    and into the clouds we'll sail
    I feel like falling into the arms
    of the man that I love
    I feel like staying there forever
    and listening for the whistling of crazy doves
    I feel like falling forever
    I feel that this could be
    the happy ending I've been searching for
    I found it in your love for me

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      i see at least 3 different tales in there, but its nice, it is both something a romantic lover would dream up and a little girl would wish for at the same time

    you did quite nicely

    | Posted on 2007-10-17 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      i like how you join different fairytales together. it is very creative. you seem like a real romantic when reading this. it had different thoughts which is good. it was a well written sweet poem.
    | Posted on 2005-04-17 00:00:00 | by cherrypie | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice. I really liked how it managed to combine differant stories together in one. I loved the
    "I feel like falling down a hole
    and arriving in wonderland
    fields full of "bread and butter" flies
    little white gloves for a rabbits hands
    arguing with a Mad Hatter
    Over where to sit for tea
    being ridiculed by a chesire cat
    with only nonsense for me"
    Good Job!
    | Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by brassmonkey2009 | [ Reply to This ]
      I was suprise that the idea of small entries all neatly organized in one piece and even explore fantasyland perfect fairy tale love which cannot resist. It was so cute, and love it. Hope to hear from you again. Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by Bang | [ Reply to This ]
      aaww...this is so sweet! its a very cool write.i liked how you used different fairy tales to describe how you felt.that made it more interesting as opposed to using just one.the wording was great.you were very clear.good job and i hope to hear more from you soon!
    | Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by black_joker1292 | [ Reply to This ]

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