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Cheerleaders


Author: manda_bear
ASL Info:    24;f; alabama
Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 57 /64 /23
Words: 102
Class/Type: Poetry /Comedy
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Cheerleaders



Cheerleading practice was great
Except for the fact I got all sweaty
I hate that so I took four
Showers when I got home
Then I IMed the squad and told
Them it's time to watch our fave show
Then I went over my routine
I'm doing alone
Like they can do it anyway
I'm not the captain for
Nothing I've always been
The best at everything
Then I took two more showers
Decided it's time to put my
Uniform on and go to bed
After all I must look
Better than the girls like I
Always do




Submitted on 2005-03-26 16:12:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  lmao. I love it girlie, I think you did an awesome job, but I see you're getting a lot of the same responses I did...people take things to literally. Hey, at least you didn't get blamed for teenage alcoholics and drug abusers, lol. It rocked my socks, now go back to looking down on those other cheerleaders. You're the best!
| Posted on 2005-03-27 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
  From the comments you've recieved I think you should add a description. Too many people are taking this too seriously. I have to agree with lilbutterfly that is sounds like a paragraph broken down into poem form, although there doesn't seem to be a strong enough rhythm to be a poem. Maybe a little revision as far as wording could make it flow a little more "poetically" other than that, I think this was a good attempt at a comical poem. Keep at it. Remember The challenge isn't in the writing of a poem, it's in the editing.
-Light
| Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by Lightbringer | [ Reply to This ]
  hay there is nothing wrong w/ hating cheerleader they are snoobe not all of there but alot of them are this is life for the people that r offended about it ur the onesthat vain
| Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by Serpent Slain | [ Reply to This ]


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