I like what you've done here, Lynn. I think of beauty as inside/outside an all emcompassing portrait of a person, including how they act. You can believe that if they live a life of love they'll be beautiful, it just goes to enhance a beautiful countenance. Even people I've never seen from this site seem beautiful to me, because of the gentle ways in which they write. Thanks for typing up a glow for me, you're a peachy lady. Thanks for sharing, Lynn, peace and love, Nan
beauty is mostly found on the inside, which is what I think you were trying to say and that everyone is beautiful in their own way. I too feel that you need more here. you described several people perhaps or compilations of a few people, but you did not really define beauty or what it means to you. you just listed. we need to see specifically what you were getting at, although we have a general idea. I think it's a good start.
You can also count me as one of the people who are trying to inspire you to give a sharper focus on your picture of beauty. In this regard I don't claim to be impervious but it seems that as time goes on I see beauty not in terms of people's bodies, but what they do with them. Actually the infatuation with the temporary body is symptomatic of the soul's confusion. Sometimes I wonder how many poems I read on this site are influenced by someone dissappointed with the physical aspects of their body ...
I liked this a lot. I didn't like the flow so much, but I loved the idea. How you highlighted the unique beauty of each women, and how it was nothing like the world's idea of it. Something that every girl/women needs to remember. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder anyway.
I like the thought that you are trying to convey with this poem, but I have to agree with the other assesments...it seems like you have so much more you want to say, but maybe don't know how to say it. Often times when a person has something something so important to say they struggle for the words...maybe take another, more in depth look at your love for inspiration.
i do agree somewhat that this poem felt like it held back a little. the thought of this poem is beautiful i work at a place where we accept the diffrences in people.. it is a clothing store called Torrid that caters to those who arent the so called "perfect body type" or the "norm" of society.. i am proud to be plus size and have my naturally curly hair... and i am glad that other people see beauty in diffrences wether that be a super skinny person.. someone with a big nose or whatever it may be.. there is beauty in us all and ir brings a smile to my face that someone has the balls to write about it! ~*~amber~*~
I know the history behind this poem so therefore I read what it is saying Lynn. And I understand what the reviews mean about not being able to get a clear fix on this and so that means you take this gem of gestation to full term and bring it back redefined and polished and rich as the gold it testifys about and bless us all!
This poem seems a bit lost to me. I get the feeling that you wanted to say so much more, but struggled against yourself. I like what you were trying to do. And I do get the visual, I just don't really care for the way it came together. Now please keep in mind, that my feeling on poetry is this, it is your child...a part of you, and so if you think it is your best, then dont let anyone convince you to change it. But if you know you could have done better, or pushed harder, then do it, because you would want to present your children at their best, to a waiting world. I look forward to reading more from you.