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    dots Submission Name: Any thing you want, I'll dodots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 370
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 997
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       tell me if this would be a good song and tell me how you feal about it.


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    dotsAny thing you want, I'll dodots
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    Any thing you want me to do
    I'll do
    I'll be your lover
    I'll be your best friend.
    Tell me what I got to do
    I'll do
    donít look any farther
    I'll do any thing you want me to do.
    Just tell me when and where to start.

    You want me to start by kissing your neck by the candlelight
    Do you want to me hold you tight while we dance under the moonlight.
    Or do you want me to hold you though the night when youíre cold and lonely.

    Any thing you want me to do
    I'll do
    I'll be your lover
    I'll be your best friend.
    Tell me what I got to do
    I'll do
    donít look any farther
    I'll do any thing you want me to do.
    Just tell me when and where to start.

    Do you want me to go all the way
    Just say
    I'll do anything you want me to do.
    Or do you want to look at the stars while drinking Champagne.

    Any thing you want me to do
    I'll do
    I'll be your lover
    I'll be your best friend.
    Tell me what I got to do
    I'll do
    donít look any farther
    I'll do any thing you want me to do.
    Just tell me when and where to start.

    Do you want me hold your hand tight when you get scared.
    Or do you just want me to love you and give you my key to my heart.

    Any thing you want me to do
    I'll do
    I'll be your lover
    I'll be your best friend.
    Tell me what I got to do
    I'll do
    donít look any farther
    I'll do any thing you want me to do.
    Just tell me when and where to start

    now baby you got me going crazy
    my heart skips a beat every time youíre within ten feet of me.
    I'm so weak without your touch.
    Now baby tell me what to do
    I'll do it.

    This is my song to you
    It's you and only you I live for.
    Now don't say this isn't true love.




    Submitted on 2005-03-26 23:19:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      what a really lucky lady... thats what i got to say! And do you have any friends, geez. This is awesome piece! Makes me wish men would really get a clue on how to make a woman smile on the inside.
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by nobodys_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Heya. To do. I'll do. That is the question. Whether it be two star crossed lovers in fair Verona where we lay our scene. Foe against foe and family against family. Again we kill ourselves over sheer ignorant love and brute mutiny. Suicide.. the capitol punishment for jealousy and strife. Murder... the accomplice for which jealousy and strife act out in rage. Good job.
    | Posted on 2005-03-27 00:00:00 | by BloodyWords | [ Reply to This ]
      thsi was pretty cool to read..
    it was soo cool that i started rapping it
    good job man
    this line is just sweet

    now baby you got me going crazy
    my heart skips a beat every time youíre within ten feet of me.
    I'm so weak without your touch.
    Now baby tell me what to do
    I'll do it.
    | Posted on 2005-03-27 00:00:00 | by sophisticatedme | [ Reply to This ]
      I was drawn to the title. And I love reading lyrics.. Cause I like to see whats out there. I really enjoyed these lyrics.. But one thing I would change... You keep repeating I'll

    Any thing you want me to do
    I'll do
    I'll be your lover
    I'll be your best friend.
    Tell me what I got to do
    I'll do
    donít look any farther
    I'll do any thing you want me to do.
    Just tell me when and where to start.

    I think it would be just great if you kept the Ill do.. and than take the Ill out in the next lines... But It sounds good either way..
    Good JOb
    | Posted on 2005-03-27 00:00:00 | by steph1011 | [ Reply to This ]


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