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The Three Tasks (Ch 3 part 3)

Author: MystMaker
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umm just a continuatoin....its a short bit but any comments are welcome

The Three Tasks (Ch 3 part 3)

Peter was worried about having to face the troll again on his way back. Now he would have to face him twice.
“Oh, and I almost forgot, he will probably ask for some money so just do a couple of hands stands or something and he might give you what you want.”
“Thanks,” Peter said as he headed for the door. Once again the door screeched on its hinges, this time he didn’t flinch.
Peter looked up at the sky, the sun was already within an hour of sun down! Time goes quickly in a place like this. He decided it would be better to run to the bridge.
As soon as he got there, the troll was waiting. He had a smirk on his face.
“Don’t think you’re the only one who goes through here looking for a key. Too bad there is no way to get it from the tabby down the road without a fish. I can imagine you’re willing to do quite a bit to get it. I will tell you what. I enjoy entertainment. If you can amuse me I’ll give you a good sized fish. If not, well, that just isn’t my fault.”
“Okay, what do you want me to do? Handstands?”
“That would be pretty funny, go on boy show me a hand stand!”
Peter saw no other alternative and tried his best attempt at a hand stand. He wasn’t the best on his hands, but it was doing the job. The troll started giggling, then laughing, then just choking.
“Alright, alright, you have convinced me! Go under the bridge and get a fish from my bucket.” He chortled some more before saying, “just don’t do that again, you might just kill me!”
Peter ran to the bank of the river and fetched a fish. With all his might he sprinted to Mr. Gegon’s house, right before the sun set. He knocked loudly on the door. Mr. Gegon came from around the house, smelling the fish.
“Give it here, give it here! What a fish! You must have done some pretty good hand stands.”
Peter dropped the fish down beside the cat.
“Where is the key?” asked Peter
“Right below you. I really think you should get your eyes checked.”
Peter leaned down, picked up the shimmering key, and started to run back to the bridge. The troll motioned for him to cross, starting to break out in snorts. He ran all the way back to the sign and through the door onto the Endless Staircase.

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  Maybe time goes so fast because Peter was really transported to a tiny strange little planet when he went down that Endless Staircase that orbits the sun faster.

Gegon reminds me of the Cheshire Cat.

So if Peter is not the only one looking for a key, the strange man he met in the cae must approach a lot of people.

I felt the dialogue was a bit forced in this segment but I did like how the cat so nonchalantly said the thing about doing handstands to Peter.

Anyway, either I forgot what the troll looks like, or you didn't mention it very much so details please. Remember more details!

I like the comical and light aire of this whole story. It puts me in a good mood. You've got these silly characters: the troll, the witch, and the cat, and they provide a lot of comic relief.

Very cute.
| Posted on 2005-10-31 00:00:00 | by Astarael | [ Reply to This ]
  im usually not into these type of stories, but you got me hooked. good job. there are some things i want to point out, but there just writing tips, nothing really that series. i love the way you capture the area around Peter, as if i was looking through his eyes. that is some detail you got there! but, you have to remember, that too much detail is not always good. you didn't do it here, but im just warning you. watch out for that. now, here's probably one of the few things to did wrong. the three character's that you said something about "but I am going to want something in return" at least three times. all these charaters sound the same to me, so you should try and change the way they say the thing above, or try something new. but other than that, all three chapters are great! keep at it! :)
| Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by Dragonslayer | [ Reply to This ]

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