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    Author: sugar-n-spice
    Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 55/49/8
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I am so extremely saddened by the Terri Schiavo case that is currently in the headlines. I wish mankind would become more pro-life orientated and allow each other another chance in life. My prayers and thoughts are with her parents who have fought until the bitter end and now have to sit helpless by her side and wait for her to starve to death.


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    If only the anguish in your
    eyes could be read
    and the pain in your
    mind be worded.
    If only your hands
    could gesture the message
    of your deep will to live.
    If only the life giving force
    could be kept in tact
    for a few more days.
    How I wish on this
    dreary Easter Sunday…

    If only you could speak




    Submitted on 2005-03-27 07:24:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi there. I remember this so clearly - it came at a time when I had to do an assignment on Euthanasia - I chose pro-life and felt these feelings so intense - your words were chosen so clearly - no messing about. Wish we could've posted on his forehead! Well written. Glad you like "Haunted" means a lot to me.
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by Aphrodite Dream | [ Reply to This ]
      I've just heard that she has died after 13 days of being without food or water. How absolutely tragic and I feel the pain of her parents - I always try to picture myself in other people's shoes and this time around I just couldn't wear the condemning slipper of her husband but my foot slipped so easily into the worn and tattered shoes of her parents... Being a parent myself brings this whole case much closer to home and I feel a sad loss for someone I never knew - as you so poignantly say "If only you could speak". So very very sad and you've captured it perfectly!
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not sure if i agree that the tube shoud be reinserted, but i like your poem. Although short, its very powerful, and i think everyone would agree with the last line, 'if only you could speak'. It must be incredibly difficult for terri's husband and family to try to judge what she would have wanted if she's unable to tell them.
    Well done in writing something topical that really makes you think.
    | Posted on 2005-03-27 00:00:00 | by tulip | [ Reply to This ]
      You have effectfully voiced the feelings of many who are aware of the insanity of not only justifying murder but enforcing it! "If only you could speak" shouldn't be a critque for the God given right to life. Baby's can't speak and that opens another can of worms per say...so let us just pray "Forgive them Father for they know not what they do". ~smile always with love Cheryl~
    | Posted on 2005-03-27 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      I know what you mean about terry. This is the most inhumane thing ever. Her so called husband needs to be shot. And I can't believe that the courts are deciding its ok TO STARVE A HUMAN BEING. I mean, you can't get away with doing that to a damn dog. But before I get off on that tangent, Your poem was wonderful. And I too have wondered what it would be like if she could just talk. I just want her to wake up and be like "what the [censored] are you doing!" and go kick some ass. You chose a great topic to write on.
    ~jane
    | Posted on 2005-03-27 00:00:00 | by Jane Lost | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! that made me feel good... so pretty .. seriously i like it...great job! i read your description on wow i had no idea this is going on you know i live in chile and news dont come here ever..jaja.. but im glad that i just heard news from you even thou they are VERY sad im glad! and great poem!!!
    | Posted on 2005-03-27 00:00:00 | by anita_89 | [ Reply to This ]


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