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Submission Name: go on...take it dots

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Author:	closetpoet
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Words:	87

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go on...take it dots

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I want you to read me
Take me in
Enjoy me
Serve me tea
Unburden yourself
Tell me your secrets
Now that you know mine
Listen to what I have to say
It's important to me
If not to anyone else
Let these words saturate
Bathe your mind in a new idea
Shed that cumbersome cloak
Of yesterdays thoughts
Try this suggestion on for size
It no longer fits me.
Take it, take it
It's for free
I was just going to throw it away

Submitted on 2005-03-27 11:43:59 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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This poem is strange, but I guess strange is just a more negative form of the word unique. So maybe I should say unique. In a way that I like a lot. It makes me want to read it over, and find different meanings in it. I think though when you say bath, it should be bathe? Though I'm not completely sure. So don't hold it against me if I'm wrong. :)
| Posted on 2005-04-18 00:00:00 | by ash20819 | [ Reply to This ]

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