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    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I want you to read me
    Take me in
    Enjoy me
    Serve me tea
    Unburden yourself
    Tell me your secrets
    Now that you know mine
    Listen to what I have to say
    It's important to me
    If not to anyone else
    Let these words saturate
    Bathe your mind in a new idea
    Shed that cumbersome cloak
    Of yesterdays thoughts
    Try this suggestion on for size
    It no longer fits me.
    Take it, take it
    It's for free
    I was just going to throw it away




    Submitted on 2005-03-27 11:43:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is strange, but I guess strange is just a more negative form of the word unique. So maybe I should say unique. In a way that I like a lot. It makes me want to read it over, and find different meanings in it. I think though when you say bath, it should be bathe? Though I'm not completely sure. So don't hold it against me if I'm wrong. :)
    | Posted on 2005-04-18 00:00:00 | by ash20819 | [ Reply to This ]


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