dude wow again with this- I'm not going to say anything bad about it I just want you to know its all going to get better-You need some assurance-you need some confidence. I feel like your slipping away and you dont care-dude dude dude dud lamemansterms
Honestly, I didn't enjoy. It really just made me slightly irritated, the work in general. I think it made me feel that way due to the word use. For example, the slang and cursing. The general piece, I believe, took away from the message. The entire thing was one huge unclearness. It reminds me of unbalanced drama vs reality issues. It could be improved by simply looking at it and really looking for things that are not clear, jumpy, un-unidirectional, etc. I would have kept my lines more balanced in syllable, made it so my grammer was according to how I want the message to be read, and checked my spelling (keeping slang/cursing to a minimum). The interpretation is that a confused tough guy is questioning himself. It feels original- however.