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Lullaby


Author: hybridmagnolia
ASL Info:    19/male
Elite Ratio:    3.44 - 198 /273 /75
Words: 541
Class/Type: Lyrics /Depressed
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Description:


a bit darker than usual, but hey, that's me


Lullaby



At times, I don’t know what I feel
Arguing in my mind
What’s fake and what’s real
So what’s the deal
Why does it make my skin peel
And make me reel
Back, away from the light
Into the darkness
Hiding from sight
But tonight
I just might
Try to give you insight
On what goes on in the mind
Of a sociopathic
Schizophrenic
Depressed and demented
Sick and twisted
Son of a bitch
It starts out with
A simple neck twitch
Then suddenly
Your whole body gets stiff
Then it begins to shake
And starts to quake
All brought about
By one oversized headache
A badass migraine
That’s not where the pain
Stops, but it keeps on growing
Then you get to knowing
All this pain that I’ve been showing
Wasn’t for show
But for sure
How life tends to go
For someone who’s got
Nothing in life
‘Cept for a bottle of pills
And a blood-stained knife
But much to your delight
This story doesn’t end this way
I guess that I’ll just
Have to die another day
‘Cause I still got
So much I need to say
The force of spoken word
Tends to outweigh
The thoughts that are
Runnin’ through my head
Along with every single
Dream I ever dread
My vision is blurred and red
Dizzying me
Spinning me round and round
Turning my whole world upside-down
Instead of asking me
Why I frown
How ‘bout you help me
Get up off the ground
And back up on my feet
Why’s it gotta be like this
Every single time we meet
For once, can’t our
Confrontation be sweet
Instead of bittersweet
I remember the way I’d sweep
You off your feet
But that was a long time ago
That was back in the day
When the day wasn’t so cold
A chance for us to be bold
One love story that was never told
Right, or at least the way it should’ve been
‘Cause I remember
When the lights got dim
You used to smile with a devilish grin
You could almost smell the sin
My decent to Hell would begin
And you would laugh
As I would fall
You reach out and catch me
To throw me back at the wall
You would laugh so hauntingly
Your voice still haunts me
I can’t sleep at night
I can’t shake you off my mind
Why can’t I ever be right?
Why do I have be the one who’s wrong
And you get the be the lucky one that’s gone
How come you don’t got as much shit in your life
How come I gotta spend every night
Stayin’ up late just
Wishin’ I’d die

Hush, young one
Don’t say a word
Don’t waste the breath
‘Cause you’ll never be heard
Wipe those wasted
Tears from your eyes
You’re never
Gonna be all right
Don’t waste the time
Trying to pray at night
There’s no
Salvation in sight
Climb six feet down
To rest your head
Let the earth
Be your new bed
You may live by day
But you die each night
Live by the gun
But die by the knife
Either way
You’ll start to see
This is what
Life is like for me




Submitted on 2005-03-27 22:11:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this was good and really long...i think you should put ending marks and you have alot of grammatical errors that need to be fixed. atleast you were creative which brought out almost a clear piture of what was happening. i enjoyed reading it.
~sweet
| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by sweet-fire | [ Reply to This ]
  Some beautiful moments, I like the part where you talk about why people ask you why you frown, instead of helping you feel better.

I think alot of this is lost in its length. Its too long. For me anyway. Sometimes poems that are this long (prose)are perfectly readable because of the journey they take you on, but this doesnt really offer new things...so its a bit monotonous. I think it would retain alot more power if it was shorter, but thats me.
Powerful though.
| Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by words_can_heal | [ Reply to This ]


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