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    dots Submission Name: COMEdots
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    Author: mimi
    ASL Info:    30/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597/390/111
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Come.
    tame the fire that burns inside my soul.
    The flames I can't control.
    Lift me high,
    let me fly.
    make me cry.
    Tame the fire that burns inside my eye,
    learn the secrets of my thigh.
    Come and apply
    small nips, and dips
    with those warm and lusicous lips.
    come and hold me.




    Submitted on 2005-03-28 12:17:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very good read and I would like to se more imagery introdued through more diverse use of the english language. I can see how he previous readers eyes were bulging. Good write xoxox
    | Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I just got up to the secrets of your thighs...and I bulged my eyes.

    Sex. Hm. Interesting. I actually really like this piece. Nobody knows what the hell you're talking about until you talk about thighs. heh. >_<
    | Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by BenevolantWords | [ Reply to This ]
      What exactly is this about...Although very good the theme is not quite clear enough..Maybe i am blind, but is this about sex, or a wanting for sex...lol
    Frog bounce
    | Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]
      Maybe it is just my interperatation, but I think this seems likea plead for good sex. Is that what it is about? the whole thieghs and nips thing is what tipped me off.
    | Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by Al | [ Reply to This ]
      my first imper is that you are a soul person who feels rather then thinks and at particular times throughout ones day feeling is much better
    i liked it
    peace mandy
    | Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by mandy dupuis | [ Reply to This ]


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