This has enough really good bits to make it worth doing again. It's a little too abstract, I sort of had the feeling the two kids were in a "grass is greener" situation, with both of them wishing they were the other? I love "battlefield of life" a great way to describe it. I'd just give a couple of more clues, maybe from the abused child's view, what did she see in the gitl on the hill's life that was better? Overall, a good write, but a tad too cryptic, but I still liked it. Be happy, Graeme
i really like it.. its notmy type of style but thats what i like about it.. great work! i disagree with fallen_angel3 i think your doesnt realy need work i like it this way....really.. good job
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