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Author: xtremegentleman
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My thoughts on the Schiavo case. More rant than poetry.


Everyone cry out
The sanctity of life
Is what this case is about

It's wrong to deny
A dog water and food
But it's right to have a
Human being's feeding tube removed?

It just doesn't make sense
Life is a right according
To the fourteenth amendment

Due process is required
But our morals have expired
And frankly Michael Schiavo
Comes off as a liar

What ever happened to the vows
That he said from his heart
"Through sickness and health
Until death do us part"

Hmmm. And what about
His history of abuse
Now a girlfriend on the side
Has two kids too.

Maybe that is the reason
Terri must be gone
But the last time I checked
Fornication was wrong

But I'm sure the Lord is standing
At the seat of the throne
With his arms opened
Waiting on Terri to come home

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  There where so amny on each side of this sad story,though more on her die as she wish and keep the gov out of it. As you know from reading my poem about Terri, I focus on her legacy and how she will and did change the lives of so many.

You did a very powerful write for your point of view. bravo
| Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW! X, you've done again. Well, I'm writing this a few days after you posted this, so you probably know by now that she has died. At first, I didn't know what to think because I know I wouldn't want to live that way, but I too thought her husband was lying. I didn't know that he had a girlfriend on the side (with kids too, what?!) I agree with you when you say:

"Due process is required
But our morals have expired
And frankly Michael Schiavo
Comes off as a liar"

Yeah... she didn't have it written down or anything, so he has no proof... Then again, what would he have had to gain from her death? Hmm... Good job X.
| Posted on 2005-04-01 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow ....Pick a controversial topic why doncha ;o)
Well i bought along my own soap box ..let me get on top and comment ..
This was well written ...Good flow ...Very powerful emotions ...
I think you hve hit the nail on the head ..and the line about "in sickness and in health" was genius ...When is it too much to look after someone you are linked to for life? it 15 yrs? ...I don't know ..I dont work like that ....You love one person ....And you love them with everything you are ...forever...
Everyone likes to go on about how she is suffering in life ....What about the fact that slowly right now she is straving to death ...Maybe they should sit for a moment and consider what that would feel like ...
A million dollars ? ...Big [censored] deal ...We spend more money on feeding prisoners who have murdered others....
Everytime i see a story on her i feel ill ....If it was her time to go ..she would be gone ....They woman ....despite her stravation ...Is holding on !!...She's fighting ....while others give up on her ...
*sigh* ...To all those who jump about saying she should be let loose ...She isnt held there...They should step out of the box and have faith in the higher powers....
People cant play God ....They arnt good enough at being selfless :)

Anyway ..Sorry im rambling ...I thought you might like to know you have a link here with me ..And i think you were brave for expressing this ..I also think its great to see you have a heart for the things around you :)
Good Job ...Blessed Be
| Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
  I completely agree with you on this X...yea it's hard on everyone husband and parents alike.

I have a hard time with the fact if she told her husband she wouldn't want to live why did it take him seven years to say something to that effect?

I hold firm to my belief that we are all here to serve a purpose and that when the good Lord is ready he calls us. For some reason none of us understand He did not call her home, yet. and for anyone to chose that well then yes it is murder. Would i want my daughter to live indefinitley on a feeding tube? if she was like Mrs. Schiavo then i would continue the feeding tube...come on people this woman has brain damage...sure the quality of life is not good but she still has LIFE.

okay my man i'm ending now because if not i'll rant and rant and rant some more...

*applauding you on your bravery to speak your mind*

"It's wrong to deny
A dog water and food
But it's right to have a
Human being's feeding tube removed?"

that stanza came out swinging like Tyson boy!
| Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  I have to say that I understand your fustration with the case, but you have to think of yourself in that position, would you want to live like that? I know that I would not. And is it even a life, to never be able to go any where alone. She can not be happy, and for her husband... I would want my husband to be happy not it and mourn for me when I'm already gone.
You did a great job with this, like have a genuine heart and you are a great person.
| Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
  where do you stand in pulling the plug n someone??? Poetry is the best way to express views, and this is a topic that brings a lot to think about. I don't think its like denying water to a dog a all....
| Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
  Well, first off, I think that he, being her husband, has the right to choose. HOWEVER, any taking of mortal life is technically a sin, so no matter how you look at it there is nothing morally correct to be done. In response to those earlier replies, I don't think if she could talk she would say she would want to be with the lord. Because she can't think that. Her brain is mush.

As far as the poem goes...

Some of the rhymes here are very shaky.

It just doesn't make sense
Life is a right according
To the fourteenth amendment

For instance, that one didn't really rhyme at all. I can see where it should have... but maybe you should have worded it a bit different in order to stay true to form.

Also, your rhythm is all screwy. I can tell you tried with it, but if you can't keep the meter, don't imitate it. Either let it flow freely or limit yourself to a certain pattern, but don't do both. It just doesn't work.

Admirable message, though.
| Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by DeadGod | [ Reply to This ]
  I do think that it may be better for her to die in peace, but I also agree that removing her feeding tube is just not right. Like you said, we won't deny animals food and water, why take it away from her?
| Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by xXxAlicexXx | [ Reply to This ]
  Your write was very good. I also have been tossed back and forth with this issue. As I understand it, her brain has ceased to function.
And yet, I being a parent, understand what her parents are going through. I dont know if I could be peace letting her go while she is still awake and alert. Such a tragedy for all. You've written your views out well here. But I do think this will be debated long after the inevitable happens. My prayers with all involved.
| Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, I liked it and I myself have mixed feeling and feel it is a very personal decision to have the right to die. I hate the inhumanity of the way in which she was ordered to die- we would get arrested if we did that to an animal- even animals we take and put to sleep. Criminals we give a lethal injection/ gas chamber too.- Can you imagine the outcry if the governmant decided to starve to death people on death row. And I too question her husbands motives and personally feel it would be best to let her live. She is on way less life support than Christopher Reeves who had both a feeding tube and a ventalator, I'm sure he would not want to starve to death even if he wanted to die.

Back to your poem- great job- you evoked emotion and put it together so nicely. This story has been definetly something I can't shake from my mind and its nice to know others are struggling too.
| Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by Gatita | [ Reply to This ]
  i too agree with munchie that she should die in piece...15 years is long don't know any thing about the turmoil the husband has gone through and yet you call him a murderer...the 1 million dollars is gone to pay for her hospital stay with costs $80k a year...
she's clearly not getting any better...why aren't you outside the hospice ranting and raving with the other lunatics...

| Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by pestiferous | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem speaks so much truth. And you have put it together very poetically. It's sad that animals have more rights than humans these days. It's sad that one is allowed (by law) to let his wife die so that he doesn't have to "deal" with her anymore. Sure she's like a little child now in her thoughts and actions.. but if everyone in that state were killed we'd be like Hitler ... getting rid of the unwanted.
Thank you for this poem.. It's a very good read, and very well stated.

Take Care!
| Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  I do think that it is time for her to be cut loose. Making someone stay alive is aweful! I can't even imagine the pain that poor girl is suffering from. Being able to see heaven but not being able to go. I am sure that if she could speak that she would want to go with the Lord.

It is great to see someone speak on this. I was just talking about this at lunch today. How ironic!

Great write. And yes, she should be able to go home with the Lord and live in happiness watching over and waiting for her family!

Li Li
| Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]

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