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    dots Submission Name: Good-bye to Springdots

    Author: PastelSky
    ASL Info:    18/F/In the clouds
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 181/223/49
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       This is mostly a nature poem about daydreaming in the warm, relaxing summer weather. My poem is entitled "Good-bye to Spring" not because of a melancholy note, but because I'm trying to convey that summer is coming (I hope that was the message that you picked up).

    I'm trying to work with the Text Formatting, so I hope the spacing came out good ;;.

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    dotsGood-bye to Springdots

    The world is quiet,

    a taciturn siesta,
    hushed by the dull,
    golden hues of summer.
    Nothing is better,

    to the nocturnal owl,

    than a





                   in peace.

    cool moods
    flatter the earth
    with nature's
    fulfilling senses.

    Not a soul

                   in sight;

    Not a word

                   can be heard.

    And thus is the moment,
    the beauty,

    of a chilly

    summer breeze.

    Submitted on 2005-03-28 16:57:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm, sounds good to read, wish I there, feeling it. Like the way it looks, but ever more how it reads. Good job, thoughtful
    | Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by nwproud | [ Reply to This ]

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