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    dots Submission Name: Locked in; Alonedots
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    Author: Kacela Kali
    ASL Info:    15/f/not telling
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 66/71/21
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsLocked in; Alonedots
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    I'm so alone.
    Locked into my head.
    My ears and my eyes,
    are filters.
    Making your words into static,
    and your faces all a blur.
    How can i escape,
    without a key.

    A key,
    sharp metal,
    red at the point.
    Stay inside the lines...
    then run out.
    This is my escape,
    my freedom.
    Even if only for a while.

    My prison is all i kow,
    temporary escape is all I can afford.
    Complete freedom is too scary,
    too messy.
    Call me a coward.
    I don't care,
    it's not like I can hear you,
    I have filters.

    The beauty is,
    you'll never know.
    Never on my arms,
    will a clue appear.
    This is hidden,
    like the rest of my soul.
    All you get are little peeks,
    you'll never see the whole.




    Submitted on 2005-03-28 18:39:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think I get this.. Kinda tough to understand.. And wow your only fifteen. I saw a couple few errors.. But other than that it was good..

    GOOD JOB
    Illl look more for yours
    | Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by steph1011 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok, I think I get it. Something about the abstractness makes it all seem so much better though. I like how you ended it, and only have one misspelling to point out. I think you meant hear, not gear, but we all make mistakes.
    Cheers,
    ~Persephone~
    | Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]


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