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    dots Submission Name: Hyper Shoppingdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/160
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 876
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    dotsHyper Shoppingdots
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    Giant biscuits; toppings of flower
    and blue gumdrop buttons, pointing,
    in a roundabout way; mmm.
    Round, and round and into town.

    Vroom, beep beep, hustling, bustling,
    Shoppers jostling, paper bags rustling
    Zebras crossing. Cross! “COUNTRY DRIVERS!”
    Trafficking drugs ragers into a hyper state.

    Rush to shop; shopping’s a rush!
    Spend ‘til I’m spent, from 9 ‘til tillers glare.
    “I KNOW BUT I’VE NOT GOT WHAT I CAME TO GET YET!”
    Dressed, undress, try dress, duress, too tight! Get stressed, redress. Grrrrrr!

    Coffee shop. Coffee! Cough! urrghh, smoke!
    Choke! Seat shuffle, scuffle, and, “fall out feet!”
    Hot cuppa, chill out, stresses spill out…
    B-r-e-a-t-h-e d-e-e-p and let your head catch up.




    Submitted on 2005-03-28 18:47:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is too cute. Your choice of words were exhilarating to read and imagine. Right into the second stanza I found myself reading it like it was a Rap song.. lol. And I don't even listen to Rap.. But this was just too cute.

    Thanks for the pick-me-up!

    Take Care!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I got to say, that i reali laugh reading this one, I reali liked it, maybe it is a little hard to read but all this mumbo jumbo have a little charm! Finally did you found what were you looking for?

    -Gothik-
    | Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by Gothik | [ Reply to This ]


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