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    dots Submission Name: No one knew his namedots
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    Author: Kacela Kali
    ASL Info:    15/f/not telling
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 66/71/21
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsNo one knew his namedots
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    Choppy whisps,
    of broken clouds.
    Send down rain,
    from the eyes if God.

    Cry for your child,
    who never said a word.
    No love is lost here,
    only the life that barely lived.

    A tense moment,
    one of the infinite.
    Broke his will,
    broke my heart.

    He couldn't take anymore,
    so he lived,
    thinking only of the end.

    He planned it out,
    in his mind.
    No evidence of any kind.
    Only his last words,
    written in blood,
    on a banner streached wide.

    His last breath,
    his last words.
    Immortalized.

    I found him there,
    nothing left.
    His eyes where dead,
    his limbs where heavy.
    His heart had stilled,
    by blood his own hand had spilled.
    Now he lives forever,
    a statistic.

    No one knew his name.





    Submitted on 2005-03-28 18:51:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really good. I really like how you go inside the persons mind, but then come out. Its like you get the whole picture, not just the shattered bits. Truly timeless!
    Cheers,
    ~Sephe~
    | Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]
      great concept in this poem. it's very sad but also a wonderful write. i like your imagination and style.
    the title tells it all...No one knew his name

    keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]


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