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    dots Submission Name: The hopes in my nightmaredots

    Author: Gothik
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 94/133/31
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe hopes in my nightmaredots

    When the moon rise to the sky
    I softly close my eyes
    Lying to myself
    Hoping that tomorrow will be better
    But it won't
    Because it can't

    But inside my dreams,
    I'm free
    Free to believe,
    Believing in me

    Letting the star shine in my head
    Hoping to one day joining them
    I'm just so sad
    I can't say why

    My life is so empty
    My life is unworthed
    I don't deserve it
    I'm so lonely...

    But tommorow can be better
    Little by little I wake up
    But only to see
    That your not with me

    Submitted on 2005-03-28 20:13:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      *Starts to glare but stops and smiles(ignoring comments)* This is so sad. Lonliness pours through it, it makes my heart ache. Lonliness can be so hard to get through. I mean, you can be in a room full of people, and still feel so damed lonly! *Sighs* Francis, you are suck a great guy. I hate that you ever felt so low. *Gives you a huge hug* You are cared about! A LOT! Just think about how much everyone freaked out when you were going to...yeah, that thing...I feel bad actually saying it... I hope you know what the hell I am talking about.

    *Cringes* I looked at the comments again...I'm sorry if this upsets you...but I am going to tell you right here and now...that the comment Kim made pisses me off...quite a bit...now you really are going to hate me...

    *Sighs* I am still going to continue reading you other poems.

    <3 Bon
    | Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good, the whole thing flows together really well. It seemed to go from happy to sadder to kinda happy again, or maybe that's just me? Anyways, keep up the great work!
    | Posted on 2005-04-21 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      Don't worry, one day you'll wake up from your nights rest to see me laying right beside you. looking into your eyes, wondering when you'll wake from your dreams.
    Now to the poem, it was really good. The structure and the rhythm worked very well together.
    Nice job.

    The angel in your dreams,

    It will happen!
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]

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