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Blue Sky: Intro

Author: MystMaker
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well, I am not sure where this story is going yet but any comments or anything are welcome, its a short segment but just kind of explains some things and gives background info. if you have suggestions, suggest away!

Blue Sky: Intro

Not to long ago, when the stars began to dim, and the powers of the cosmos were not what they once were, the human race was struggling to keep alive. The once pure blue planet of Earth was now dun and the Great Evacuations were coming to pass. I was only 12 when they came. We were forced to leave everything we owned behind and board an air bus with hundreds of people. Our ship, along with many others, was headed towards what scientists called “Our Last Hope” but they did not know, that it in time, would be lost. The Four Great Stations or FGS, were to house us along with 200,000 people. Each FGS housed 50,000 people and was separated into ten sections. The first five sections would sleep while the last 5 sections worked, this way the station was up and running 24/7. I am sure by now you are asking, why only 200,000? That is because only the brightest and most promising scientists and workers would be allowed to live on one of the FGS. The rest of the people back on earth would be left to perish in their own pollutants and toxins. But my story takes place two years later, when I was 14 years old and the school year was finally coming to an end. The story I am about to tell you is not a story you are familiar with. It takes place at the end of one thing and the beginning of another. As all stories must, I will start at the beginning.a

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  this is a great idea! ill just give you some advice about how you should go along with it. you should put in somewhere in your story about why humans had to leave earth, and some more details about the scientists, but you could always leave that for a cliff hanger for later, but that's your decision. if you need any help with your story, just come to me. ive been writing for a while. if you need some inspiration, you could always read some of my works that i put up here. im not asking you to read them, just that if you need to freshen up your mind, just pop up my story's. see you around.
| Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by Dragonslayer | [ Reply to This ]
  I often wish I could muster the discipline to write a story...i like the basis for this piece and am already intriqued as to where it's going 2 go. I loved "It takes place at the end of one thing and the beginning of another." That is a profound statement in which we all have been...i just had a birthday...35...I feel as this now...I don't know what was different yesterday or the day before my birthday but i feel just that statement. Thank you most graciously for sharing. Love, Peace, Joy!
| Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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