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    dots Submission Name: the phone ringsdots
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    Author: monophobic
    ASL Info:    16/f/somewhere,someplace
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 70/88/32
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsthe phone ringsdots
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    as she slides the knife across her skin she screams
    whatever happened to its a wonderful life?
    considering nobody really knows her
    nobody should really miss her
    as she thinks about it she realizes
    she knows so little about herself
    how could she except anyone else to figure her out
    in her grey world her red blood seems sacred
    so the time she spends with the knife
    becomes her favorite
    her thoughts on life were that we all live to die
    and dying was all she cared to do
    not it was time for the pills to take her away
    but before she swallows that bottle the phone rings and for some reason she answers
    the voice says
    "hey hunny its dad, i just wanted you to know i'll be home tomorrow, i miss you, i love you, and i hope all is well"
    and suddenly she feels better
    everythign seemed to be okay for the next five minutes that they talked
    when she hung up the phone she realized how close she just was to death
    and she laughs until she cries because now she has something in her life to look forward to
    the next day comes and the phone rings again
    the voice says
    "hey hunny, sorry i won't make it back into town today"
    and without another thought the bottle she thought she'd never touch again was in her system
    she looked in the mirror and waved goodbye to the world that she never really knew but all the same never really knew her





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