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    dots Submission Name: "My $1.99 Breakfast"dots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 257
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1170
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       I've had this topic in my head a while but couldn't seem to spit it out the way I really wanted to. I don't know if I said everything I wanted to say but the point is there, I hope you enjoy it cause it is a little bit of a different style than I usually tend to write. anyway Viola!
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    dots"My $1.99 Breakfast"dots
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    I am eating breakfast
    in the same place I ate it yesterday,
    and I haven't left.
    or slept
    It'll be quite a shock
    the next time I see a clock.
    It's been days, maybe weeks?
    It's kind of been a while since I even thought about sleep.
    It's this town,
    the people the lights.
    the sounds
    Usually this is illegal, but here everythings alright.
    Dreams are made here but mostly they are trampled
    Your wife, your kids, your boat
    Poof! -gone up in smoke-
    and that chick you handled,
    stole your wallet
    so now you're broke.
    But still we dream of that number
    or maybe that one card.
    The one that was calling your name
    right from the start.
    Sometimes it hits.
    But more often it puts you closer to the coffin,
    and in deep shit;
    with your family
    cause they haven't seen you all week.
    You know what I mean?
    when it seems
    you can do no wrong?
    When you are on that roll
    -you can't fold-
    everything is perfect and it feels right
    but your vices
    always win
    and now they control your life,
    they kept you here too long
    you slept through your friend advice,
    and with just one roll of the dice
    the days and nights overlapped
    and all the other crap
    got dumped on your lap.
    That's why you're eating your $1.99 breakfast
    with only $1.00 left...
    ......................................ahhhh.....Vegas!

    L A M E M A N S T E R M S




    Submitted on 2005-03-28 21:27:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well...i figured i'd check this one out since you mentioned it when you had read my post 2.99 special...so...anywho...i like this its lifes reality mixed wth a twist of humor...atleast i found the end humorous maybe just me...anywho...it sorta reminded me of beat poetry when i read it it has a rythmn to it...i've never gambled...but i had an uncle who used to...and was always broke...guess he shouldnda lived in vegas...anywho...rambling...purp
    | Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      This definitely speaks honestly and truly about addiction, when it manifests itself as gambling... but if you replace gambling with nearly anything else addictive (drugs, sex, food, etc), it still works. I can only imagine that you either suffer from this, or know someone close to you that does, because you have hit the feelings dead on... brilliant.
    | Posted on 2005-04-01 00:00:00 | by jer | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, definately something different for you. I think that you touched on the addiction side of gambling, how you can never leave, even though you're broke. It's a nice side of you to see occasionally. For some odd reason, sincere (I guess this isn't really that sincere, but you know what I mean) suits you. I think that you should definately start writting more stuff like this. Good job dude.
    ~Jess
    | Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by shmuzzelle | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this a lot, it's unique. I have never gambled or been around it really so I can't relate to your experiences but you painted a clear picture. I like your style, it's was very clear and well written.
    | Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]


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