[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Caught In The Cross-Firedots

    Author: darkened_soul
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 812/868/171
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 1235
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 851

       This is about someone trying to fix everything and make everything perfect, but losing himself at the same time.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsCaught In The Cross-Firedots

    Caught up in the cross fire
    Scared of being left behind,
    Hiding from the truth
    Ignoring what's between the lines.

    Trying to mend something ripped
    That's been torn apart at the seems,
    Living a lie that destroys him
    Because he is living "the dream."

    He follows a path that isn't his own
    Even if it was, it has ended,
    Trying so hard to pick up the pieces
    he wnats everything to be mended.

    He's trying too hard to fix it
    He's killing himself on the inside
    He's losing his potential because
    He refused to give up his pride.

    I got caught in the cross fire
    Between the fiercest of fights
    A man who was fighting the battle
    Between the dark and the light.

    Submitted on 2005-03-28 21:37:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      Oh wow, seriously this one touched me. The sad part is, I can't tell you why... nothing in particular jumped out at me yet it was amazing to me.

    <3 Jess
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by Lil J | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I really enjoyed this poem. I think everyone knows how it feels to try hard to fix something because it's important to them, but then they end up stretched so thin. Very good write. <3 Almost
    | Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by almostknowhere | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]