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    dots Submission Name: A Wink & A Smiledots
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    Author: C. Starr
    ASL Info:    35/yesplz/State of denial
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 130/196/68
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1158
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 570



    Description:
       Written in 2001


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    dotsA Wink & A Smiledots
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    It may seem darling,
    That I'm always in your dreams.
    That face....out in the crowd,
    Those eyes that follow you around.
    A wink and a smile from days long past,
    A memory of a face for which your mind is attached.
    A certain thing I said or how I looked laying in your bed,
    Those things you'll remember, those things shall forever stay in your head.
    And sometimes...
    Late at night, you may feel a presence watching you sleep,
    Don't get scared baby, you know that's just me.




    Submitted on 2005-03-29 01:51:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well ya did it you are now stalked and this is now a fav-I got goose bumps. I swear this doesnt happen to often in fact it doesnt but this one got me-I am not sure why, I just can really relate to this
    A wink and a smile from days long past,
    A memory of a face for which your mind is attached
    A certain thing I said or how I looked laying in your bed,
    Those things you'll remember, those things shall forever stay in your head.
    [ I love it good one real good one
    L.t
    | Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmmmmmmmmm...interesting...The impression that I get of this piece (this may be off base, but then again, so am I :P)...It reminds me of A guy whose obsessed with a girl written from the perspective of the girl (as the guy pictures her to be) I hope that makes sense :P

    keep WrIting!
    S-T-(dubble U)
    | Posted on 2005-04-22 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      pretty good, i liked this one to. It seemed to start off kinda dark and dense but just as the words drew me in, without warnning, this drifting nightmare brightens with careing love, and a restfull ending. keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      Its kinda weird but in a good way. It dosent follow any standard, I like that. Good imagery, and well balanced thought. A easy read and understandable. I did like it.
    Ben
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked it very much...it kinda seemed like an echo...don know...the ending was a bit ubruped but other than that it was good.keep up the writing

    ?dreamer?
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by dreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      Maybe this is not about a lingering love but it certainly is a lingering poem. I like it, can't find fault with what you've written and i am impressed with the story line.
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]


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