Description: I'm not sure how good this is, but I wrote something, so I'm happy.
We stow ourselves away
when we're not in use
in our filing cabinet offices
that we perform like somnambulists
in our dull crate uniforms
we call our homes
in which we are hypnotized
by cubes of flickering light
and twittering sound.
We move from storage unit
to storage unit
in our wheeled boxes,
and getting in and out of them
is the only fresh air,
tThe only natural light
we ever get.
Our brains continue to atrophy
as our waistbands expand.
ah sleep walking through life...the 9-5 hum drum...not for me...
don't want to atrophy...and it is so easy to do....
with nothing to challenge our minds...it happens...
i used to work in a refinery during summers in college..digging ditches for oil leaks...i kept sane by singing to myself all day..although it was good exercise for the body...my mind wanted to fall asleep...
i relate to this..had several jobs like it...and now am so grateful to teach...it challenges me while i get to challenge others
There should be more shouldn't there? I often wonder how a person can live a life from house to car to work to car to home to couch to TV to bed. There just has to be more. Of course, for most of us on here, I'm sure there is. Afterall, this is more than TV. At least we're creating things, and interacting.
I think you do a fine job here of capturing that feeling of listless existence. And yeah, the waistline seems to be a good guide.
This reminds me of the movie Office Space...I love that movie. I have never worked in an office before, I swore I never would. I couldn't even bear the thought of experiencing what you describe above. But I know you are talking about other things as well. I love the part about the waistline expanding. People in our society are growing sleepier and fatter. They sleepwalk through their days, they perform monatanous tasks that they have no passion for and they eat crap and fast food and everything winds up being void of any kind of soul at all. Visiting Europe is the cure for all of that. My whole perspective changed when I went to Denmark. They live so differently. We have to wake up. This is great Amy. xo Magnolia
this is great and so true... jump out of the box people!! it's like those cubicle things people work in, all closed in in their own little worlds. this has a lot of great images, i like the "dull crate uniforms." like robots, really. great job! you have a typo in the last line. "out waistbands" should be "our waistbands," yes?
Funny how my main aim in life as a marketer is to 'think outside the box'... clearly admitting that I'm in one ;-) You've done a brilliant job with this. Unique images and thought provoking lines - "And getting in and out of them Is the only fresh air The only natural light We ever get" Captures the sad reality of being caught in a colorless, mindless and stereotype life that just carries on and on until we get put into yet another 'box' for the eternal rest... Very well written!
This is life in America, right down to staring at the "flickering box". Well, thankfully I am not a television head, I am an elite head. How do we propose to get people to think "outside of the box?" This is really well done, Amy, I like how you've addressed an ill of society in a unique way. This perspective is really well thought out and your images are really fresh. Great job, thanks for sharing this one. Hugs and raspberry torte Nan
Love how you likened a sickening 9-to-5 job to living in boxes. The claustrophobic atmosphere of a cubicle is described perfectly! How people work in automation. At least,that's the way I interpreted it. Anyone having mundane jobs reading this will immediately tender in their resignations I think.
Talk about a lot of descriptions and symbolic meaning in this! :) I really like it. Your familiar style and format is a great comfort to me. The words always amaze me though. :) It is something the way people robotically go about their life not taking in the little pleasures in life such a nice day. I enjoyed this greatly. Great job! -blt
I used to be one of those people (and probably still am a little bit). this was great. I too am quite cynical and every time I see a woman working in an office, I imagine there's a stick up her ass, and then I remember that used to be me! oh well. your poem says it all! nice job.
I like the thoughts behind this. However I find this piece somewhat forced. As if you wanted to say something but kinda lost it in the timing. The descriptiveness is good and I can see the images you are writing about. But I am sorry I am lost but the lack of flow. The subject matter is something really cool to write about and I am glad you chose it. I wouold like to see this piece cleaned up a little. But it is all about poetic license, if you like it the way it is, then by all means do not let my simple self disuade you.