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    Author: toyysruss
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 494/336/134
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsnoisedots
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    can you turn it down
    or completley off
    can you wipe it away
    with just a cloth
    can it be settled down
    without a frown
    and finally when
    there's no one around
    silence comes
    and then you've won




    Submitted on 2005-03-29 14:40:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i agree with you on the forced part.i started to change it but i dont like to amend my first instinct or thought that comes to mind.thank u though
    good luck
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. Allthough the rhyming seemed a little forced in :

    "or completley off
    can you wipe it away
    with just a cloth"

    But other than that I really enjoyed it. Short and sweet and very creative. Well done.
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by Oli | [ Reply to This ]


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