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Pushing Me Away

Author: Chicool2
ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania
Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266 /260 /60
Words: 139
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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This came to me. I am waiting for a piece that people can really accept, and relate to. We can all relate to this in a way. Hope you enjoy

Pushing Me Away

I never thought that the world
Could influence me to this degree
But it's not the world
Instead influenced by our own country
People like us

Racism lives
As well as more discrimination
And I don't understand
How we separate
Into our own cliques

So he's pushing me away
You're pushing me away
Pushed away
By the ones I can love

Especially by Him
The one I care for
That doesn't see I exist
And I can't do a thing
To force someone to love you back
Is the same as pushing them away
Driving them away

In a new direction
Just because
We don't have the reasons

You're still pushing me away
As everyone else has
And if I force you
It's the same as pushing you away....

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  damn... you'r either
1- the most forgetfull person ever.
2- the slowest writer ever. HURRY UP.
| Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by WD20x2 | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm a bit lost on this piece as well. You were talking about discrimination and racisim and then went on to talk about someone who you love that doesnt know you are alive...perhaps you don't fit in to his "group" of friends?

I dunno...*shrug*
| Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  I think i got a explation out of this or whatever. Well auctually i have 2...someone is making fun of you for your background or whatever. And the other one...someone you like is making fun of you or pushing you away, i'm getting the person you like out of it. I don't know maybe i'm wrong. From what i see it is good. I don't think it should matter what you are or where you came from, but people are people and they belive what they want and it really sucks sometimes. I dont' know if i can relat to it though. ..

| Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm not quite sure what the issue is in this piece. I see something about race and a male but it is not easily understandable. Clean it up a bit, do some clarification...

| Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
  I have to confess, I am not sure if I get it it or not. It sounds like your man or you have different color skin and that he not wanting to take the risk of what people will think.

Pride in our national heritage is the root of all prejudice.
| Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  Amy you said I wouldn't get this. I kind of do dear.. Well there is a lot of messages I got out of this.. Many of which we just discussed.. But than I got another vibe.. dOnt ask.. People making fun of you...haha that did happen before because of your backround.. But I dont think you meant anything by that.. But I dont see why he is letting you go.. Seriously he is a complicated person if you ask me..

Um I would say this is not your best.. I thought it would be way better. You have a huge gift.. and this didnt really get me excited.. Sorry to say... I am sure youll think of something to write...

| Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]

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