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    dots Submission Name: Pushing Me Awaydots

    Author: Chicool2
    ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266/260/60
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 936
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       This came to me. I am waiting for a piece that people can really accept, and relate to. We can all relate to this in a way. Hope you enjoy

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    dotsPushing Me Awaydots

    I never thought that the world
    Could influence me to this degree
    But it's not the world
    Instead influenced by our own country
    People like us

    Racism lives
    As well as more discrimination
    And I don't understand
    How we separate
    Into our own cliques

    So he's pushing me away
    You're pushing me away
    Pushed away
    By the ones I can love

    Especially by Him
    The one I care for
    That doesn't see I exist
    And I can't do a thing
    To force someone to love you back
    Is the same as pushing them away
    Driving them away

    In a new direction
    Just because
    We don't have the reasons

    You're still pushing me away
    As everyone else has
    And if I force you
    It's the same as pushing you away....

    Submitted on 2005-03-29 14:43:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      damn... you'r either
    1- the most forgetfull person ever.
    2- the slowest writer ever. HURRY UP.
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by WD20x2 | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm a bit lost on this piece as well. You were talking about discrimination and racisim and then went on to talk about someone who you love that doesnt know you are alive...perhaps you don't fit in to his "group" of friends?

    I dunno...*shrug*
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      I think i got a explation out of this or whatever. Well auctually i have 2...someone is making fun of you for your background or whatever. And the other one...someone you like is making fun of you or pushing you away, i'm getting the person you like out of it. I don't know maybe i'm wrong. From what i see it is good. I don't think it should matter what you are or where you came from, but people are people and they belive what they want and it really sucks sometimes. I dont' know if i can relat to it though. ..

    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not quite sure what the issue is in this piece. I see something about race and a male but it is not easily understandable. Clean it up a bit, do some clarification...

    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to confess, I am not sure if I get it it or not. It sounds like your man or you have different color skin and that he not wanting to take the risk of what people will think.

    Pride in our national heritage is the root of all prejudice.
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Amy you said I wouldn't get this. I kind of do dear.. Well there is a lot of messages I got out of this.. Many of which we just discussed.. But than I got another vibe.. dOnt ask.. People making fun of you...haha that did happen before because of your backround.. But I dont think you meant anything by that.. But I dont see why he is letting you go.. Seriously he is a complicated person if you ask me..

    Um I would say this is not your best.. I thought it would be way better. You have a huge gift.. and this didnt really get me excited.. Sorry to say... I am sure youll think of something to write...

    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]

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