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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
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       Rough draft. It's not done it's a big project.tell me how you feel.

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    Get the propane, Rollin things and lets blow this place uuuuuup
    You already know whatís uuuuuup
    I might a had to pay some extra buuuuuucks
    But I really donít give a fuuuuuck
    When Iím all ready in rollin in on my Cadillac
    Looks like Iím gliding on some glaze

    24's on the truck. Spin when you stop. Nasty nasty nasty nasty
    See that ass mommies caught. The way she shake it
    She makes it drop
    makes me want to stop
    and look at her a second time, if I don't it will be paying a fine fine fine fine fine.

    Donít know what ya got but my bag will, put yo stuff, ta shame
    All tha different kinds of otha flavors, they dont mean a thing
    You cant compare it dont stare cuz I got the ultimate Mary Jane

    Iím a keep smokin till I reach my peak peak peak peak
    Or till im stuck and my body feel so weak weak weak weak weak

    I don't need your money
    I already stole your honey honey honey honey.
    Every body in ta da club think it's so funny.

    Submitted on 2005-03-29 14:49:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Lol, do you like to rap? You know drugs are bad! Lol, I liked it and it was different than most of the poems at elite. Good job!
    | Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by fallenpopcorn10 | [ Reply to This ]
      That is [censored]ed up and its funny good job. you steal peoples honies, thats not nice where i live that'd get you shot, smoking weed is bad bad bad, if you do stop it your frying your brain cells and then you won't be able to write the death poems that i like so much.
    | Posted on 2005-05-08 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      that would probably be cooler if you put it to music. it's really good though. I don't want to say anything bad cuz i couldn't rap for my life.
    | Posted on 2005-04-03 00:00:00 | by ShadowAlchemist | [ Reply to This ]

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