A very active descriptive emotion packed poem concluding time and time again with "when worlds collide'. The most important part is when word collides and this piece leads to somewhere I have yet to reach. Is it me? Maybe. ~always with love Cheryl~
what a novel idea,holding such beauty and reverance. i have read many different things and this comes with such an ease and truth. it could very well calm the wild beast. well done and it left me in awe! if you ever feel in the mood for something dark... look up some of my newer stuff. good luck to you.
i think that you should take out one of the bitters, repetition in the same line never really works, it takes away from a poem more than it gives.
also your poem is mostly about the sky and earth, maybe play up more of the water, maybe volcanoes, because the title states when WORLDS collide, i think that you should add a little bit more to it, you have got a great beginning here. also the part with the stars that is very good, maybe use that more and the sun maybe like melting junk, use more than the sky. my favorite line is when waves comedown rushing silencingthe beating hearts i think that line is very powerful. this made me think of the apocolypse.