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    dots Submission Name: R.I.P Mommadots
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    Author: Charlenee
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Bay Area
    Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 60/63/9
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1612
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       The day after my mother died I sat down and thought of my mother, I then picked up a pen and this is what I wrote.


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    So, what am I suppose to say?
    Am I expected to lie, and tell everyone it's okay?
    Well it's not!
    And it never will be
    I only have one mother and now she's with my Granny.
    I would give anything to see her again.
    My mother was my best friend.
    I loved her with all my heart and I know she felt the same.
    But now she's gone-
    Up in heaven, I'm sure.
    She was truly an angel on Earth,
    When I needed a hug,
    her arms were always open.
    When I needed to talk,
    she always lent me an ear.
    When I needed comfort,
    she was always reassuring.
    I will never forget that,
    She was my rock,
    Not even my father could hold me down.
    I love you Momma,
    and truly miss you,
    And I want you to know,
    I'll never forget you!




    Submitted on 2005-03-29 18:48:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thanx for you comment on fatal tears i am glad you enjoyed your post is vey poweful and will relate to all as we will all loose or have lost our parents
    great write and great read
    thanx again
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-05-27 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh God. I hate . . that this happened to such a sweet loving girl. You have stayed strong though and I respect you so much for that. *Smiles*

    Your mom would be proud of you and you gave her a beautiful tribute. She's smilling down at you and loving you from Heaven.
    ~BCute
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that's tough. This poem was very heartfelt. I can sense the anger and empowerment you received from such a tragic event. I guess you just have to turn adversity into an inner strength and that seems like what you've done.

    Stw
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      wow.sorry.i cannot really comment coz i haven't had that kind of thing happening to my immediate family, tho i know it has to happen. i think its very courageous of you to sit down and write a poem about it, its sweet, i am sure your mother wd have loved it.
    cool.
    | Posted on 2005-04-03 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]
      i cannot even imagine losing my mother. reading this made me realize how precarious life can be and that those we love can be taken at any time. i can't crit this, as it is so very hearfelt and speaks of the great love you had for your mother. thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2005-04-02 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Baby baby baby I feel your pain and sorrow on so many levels I know how it feels to lose a loved one I can relate to what your feeling i've been going through it for the last couple of years and i'm just relizing that persons not coming back and I guess i'll have to see them crossroads or something like that. But remember when I lost my friend to a knife in the chest...sorry had to wipe the tear from my eye.. anyways I remember not wanting to believ it and everyone was waiting for me to break down but I wouldn't give anyone the satisfaction of seeing me cry cause I never I mean never cry over anyone but seeing his body in the coffin in his blue suit...sorry another tear lol... anyways seeing him in his blue suit made wanna die and give up on life completely and I almost did I went into a deep depression and didn't give a flying [censored] about anyone or myself for that matter I ruined my first two years of high school cause of it and now i'm paying for it. Well let me end this sad ass story by saying this is going on my favorites with your other other poem. So if have the chance read my poem R.I.P. Tyrone ok I appreciate it. 1 love
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by C. Flava | [ Reply to This ]
      It is clear by what has been said on your poem that there is value in humans being together physically. It was so sad, but thats life. Yet your strong and brave enough to overcome this. Hopefully today your feeling is better than before and don't worry she is with you always.
    | Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by Bang | [ Reply to This ]
      You are brave and a truly stong person to share your greif and this person;a poem with us. thank you. I am sure yout poem gives voice to many thay share your pain in loosing their mother... makes me reconsider not sharing a closer relationship with mine.
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Char,
    Thanks for bringing this piece to my attention. I'm happy you were able to write about your feelings and howmuch your mother means to you. It really is theraputis isn't it?

    I love the first line. You really don't know how're you're suppose to react, what you're supposed to say, etc. It speaks volumes to me.
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by I_Bleed_Ink | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't relate to you but my mother and i are really good friends and i dont know what i would do without her. This poem was very good, it made me sad that you lost her because i don't know what i would do if i lost mine.
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by michelle8586 | [ Reply to This ]
      

    This is so sad, I'm sorry to hear about your mother. I hope things get better. I really liked this poem, it means so much for someone to acknowledge, their pain and be able to deal with it.
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by lost and alone | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very heart felt write and you will only have one mother...unconditional love...i can not critique this because of the subject...my mother passed 4 years ago and it's still a sensitive subject for me...i wrote on for her entittled
    "remeeting mother"...

    pestiferous
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by pestiferous | [ Reply to This ]


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