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    dots Submission Name: Love Jones #2dots
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    Author: C. Flava
    ASL Info:    19/M/ILLINOIS
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 87/117/28
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLove Jones #2dots
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    Please don't leave me
    Your my heart and my soul
    Just being without you
    Makes me not wanna go on.

    You say you love me
    But you know it isn't true
    So just keep humoring me
    And leading me on.

    It hurt's me so much
    Knowing you don't need me
    Like I need you
    Ecspecially when I do
    Everything for you.

    But if you feel you must "Move On"
    Then just go right ahead
    But always remember one thing
    I will love you to the very end.




    Submitted on 2005-03-30 01:16:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      *Sigh* poor baby. You've been hurt and I see that. It seems to me that this poem was a venting thing and not so much of a artistic thing. It needs a bit of fine tuning but a memorable piece nonetheless.

    :)

    -Janese
    | Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by Chi-Town Rose | [ Reply to This ]
      "Your my heart and my soul"
    Should be "you're"

    LOL, know what the first thing I thought of when I read the title?

    "Love Jones is on the TV again, baby.
    I wanna go down south."

    *Sigh* gotta love Prince.
    Were you meaning to make a reference to the movie of the same title? LOL, it kinda souns like the plot. The second stanza is what really gets to me. It's so sad...he knows she doesn't love him, knows she's leading him on and yet he'd prefer that she stay with him so he won't be alone. Oh Flava, you made sad this morning.
    ~_^
    | Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by I_Bleed_Ink | [ Reply to This ]
      well it was "oh so sad " if thats what you were going for? I mean I know you obviously just need tgo get rid of that stuff[that builds up] inside your head when you lose a girlfriend. Especially the feeling when they break up with you. Oh do I know it well . I went on alil tear of what I like to call chicklets. Because that's what they are +'chicks+an outlet of my minds frustration+Chicklet[kinda] anyway You do have to blow this out like mowing the lawn so to speak cause if you don't you will have some serious [censored]-That someone is going to have top deal with eventually. When you do blow it out you will start writing better. I see this was #2- is there a 3?- It's just that theses are all things [cliché's] that all of us have said sometime before and probobly alot. You basically wrote a poem that has been done by everyone before, but thats not horrible;its your feelings and I feel you but a poem needs to be more than some cliché' that everyone [for sure] has said or written before. Know what I mean?
    L a m e m a n s t e r m s
    | Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]


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