*Sigh* poor baby. You've been hurt and I see that. It seems to me that this poem was a venting thing and not so much of a artistic thing. It needs a bit of fine tuning but a memorable piece nonetheless.
LOL, know what the first thing I thought of when I read the title?
"Love Jones is on the TV again, baby. I wanna go down south."
*Sigh* gotta love Prince. Were you meaning to make a reference to the movie of the same title? LOL, it kinda souns like the plot. The second stanza is what really gets to me. It's so sad...he knows she doesn't love him, knows she's leading him on and yet he'd prefer that she stay with him so he won't be alone. Oh Flava, you made sad this morning. ~_^
well it was "oh so sad " if thats what you were going for? I mean I know you obviously just need tgo get rid of that stuff[that builds up] inside your head when you lose a girlfriend. Especially the feeling when they break up with you. Oh do I know it well . I went on alil tear of what I like to call chicklets. Because that's what they are +'chicks+an outlet of my minds frustration+Chicklet[kinda] anyway You do have to blow this out like mowing the lawn so to speak cause if you don't you will have some serious [censored]-That someone is going to have top deal with eventually. When you do blow it out you will start writing better. I see this was #2- is there a 3?- It's just that theses are all things [cliché's] that all of us have said sometime before and probobly alot. You basically wrote a poem that has been done by everyone before, but thats not horrible;its your feelings and I feel you but a poem needs to be more than some cliché' that everyone [for sure] has said or written before. Know what I mean? L a m e m a n s t e r m s