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    dots Submission Name: Unspeakabledots

    Author: solitary_cross
    ASL Info:    19/female/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 92/107/24
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I'm about to step into college and my mind's not really clear on what is going to happen when I'm already there. I'm excited but afraid. I know what I'm going to be but to reach that goal it will take a lot of risk and patience for my part.

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    A step that produced ripples
    Along the stream of thought
    Faintly touched the ground
    Between now and probability

    The view of the far away land
    Expanded across the horizon
    But still the fogs of hesitation
    Continued to seep in

    The moving photographs
    Intertwined with each other
    Like threads of a weaver
    Settling down to form a loom

    Somehow a prophecy
    Meant to be warmly grasped
    Yet a remote destination
    That will forever remain unknown

    Submitted on 2005-03-30 03:58:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the feeling of this, rich words, clear ideas with this underlying feeling of doubt. Very interesting and one of those poems you could read a few times to fully appreciate.
    | Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by C. Starr | [ Reply to This ]

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