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    dots Submission Name: Nothing at Alldots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       This is about those people that can sit and watch people go through pain, they are completely numb to anything...heartless I suppose.


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    dotsNothing at Alldots
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    I sit in an uncomfortable shell inside your heart
    in this place I feel nothing like you
    I can hate
    I can burn
    I can slowly pull the life from the eyes of those that love me
    In here, in this heart that never bleeds
    I feel they way you do
    or perhaps not...
    you seem to feel nothing at all




    Submitted on 2005-03-30 13:45:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it but the first line could use some tweaking. How about: "I sit in the uncomfortable shell of your heart" or "I sit in the uncomfortable shell that is your heart" ... just a thought.
    Anyway, about the meaning behind the words, I feel sometimes, as though I am this person you describe. For example, last Thursday was my great grandmother's funeral, and for some reason I was unable to cry. Don't get me wrong, I loved my grandma and I'm sad that she's no longer here but I just can't cry anymore. I feel as if my heart, as you said, is a shell. There's no more room for sad or happy, just empty. I mean I still have these emotions but I lack the feeling that lets you know they are real. You know the ones, the flutter in your chest when you know you love, or the dull ache that comes with sadness. These and more have left me. Only the shadow of feeling impresses its weight upon my heart, and I think it hurts.

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    | Posted on 2006-05-05 00:00:00 | by owlman23 | [ Reply to This ]
      not bad, however one or two typos, and i'd reconstructure it and through in a few antonyms as opposed to what's currently there, well message
    | Posted on 2005-05-05 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey I agree with you. My family acts like that. They act like nothing is wrong but they know that there is something wrong. The sad thing is they know it has something to do with our family too. They act like there is nothing to feel. I like this poem it's very good.
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by manda_bear | [ Reply to This ]
      great write looking in at someone that you love or no and to find they dont like love or need you the same is kind of a kick in the you can fill in the blank spaces that you just happen to find out about someone great post maybe read eyes of sandman
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    | Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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