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    dots Submission Name: please risedots
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    Author: toyysruss
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 494/336/134
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsplease risedots
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    i am dissapointed everyday
    by what people do,think or say
    why do we all act the same
    boy oh boy,it sure is a shame

    can we ever rise above
    like a biscuit or a dove
    to a higher plane
    it sure wouldn't be a shame
    any longer




    Submitted on 2005-03-30 16:56:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Some of it seemed a little forced to me but I get where you're coming from. The dangers of conformity are too often over looked or dismissed as paranioya(no idea if I spelled that right). I didn't really like it but all the same it was a good idea and I would want to read more from you sometime.

    Blessed Be!
    | Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting.......being the culinary student I am, any reference to food makes me happy....I had to read this piece a few times.....it's simple and short....I dont know if I'm digging it too much......but I'm not disliking it either....it's not evoking any amazing feelings of bliss or disgust out of me and I dont like that....it's just there....wow....I'm sorry...this is the worst thing I've written all day......but I did love the biscuit reference.....keep writing

    blessed be,

    Reveries
    | Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by reveries | [ Reply to This ]


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