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    dots Submission Name: You and Idots
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    Author: PookiezBookie
    ASL Info:    16/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 103/129/49
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsYou and Idots
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    You make my heart go in circles.
    They way a whirlpool does in the middle of the ocean.
    No longer will I fumble in and out of love because what we share is here to stay.
    You make me read between the lines and focus on what really matters, the inside of a books covers.
    With you, there is no limit to how far we can go and the things we can explore.
    The world is at our feet.
    High above the skies in the heavens, is where we reside in eternity.
    I wish for us, the most wonderous things, so that we too, like those old couples in the park holding hands and talking, will be like that for the next generation to see and admire.




    Submitted on 2005-03-30 17:18:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You have a lot of heart. I can tell from this and several of your other pieces that you are looking for your niche. Keep reading! It really helps with flow and ideas.

    Keep looking at things differently. It's good to be outside "them" sometimes.

    ---DG
    | Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by DeadGod | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn! Ur pretty good lookin if u don't mind me sayin. Now I feel letcherous since ur only 15. All good tho - anyhow the poem seems a little trite if i do say so myself. It suffers from the same things teen love suffers from - unending hope and optimism untempered by the slightest bit of reality. I guess dats the point of young love tho right? Honestly tho, at least u have some good ideas on wot love is - but those old ppl in the park been doin wot they doin for a minute - and it was a hard minute to get thru im sure.
    shard
    | Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]


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