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    dots Submission Name: ?The Shoe Stare?dots

    Author: PookiezBookie
    ASL Info:    16/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 103/129/49
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       i was in English, and i just started starring at this girl in front of me and her shoes. It was really weird. hopefully no one saw me. lol. i just thought i would write a description on what i saw, but using a different context. different than the average write.

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    dots?The Shoe Stare?dots

    The soles forming triangular rivets of mystery.
    A dark, navy blue sky, outlined with a white lace and configuring a weary face of a screaming woman as she watches her baby being taken away by the aging of society.
    Inside, an imprinted mark given from birth with those many unique pathways that distinguish me from you.
    And last but not least, the logo of an ambassador imprinted, for life, at the end of a tall tale of lies.

    Submitted on 2005-03-30 17:22:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this to, it was written real well with deepness and pure thought. good wording, good flow of realism and perfect in the view of open mind. keep it up girl.
    | Posted on 2005-04-02 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I dont think i have ever read something written about a shoe. But your imagery is so awesome that you forget that you are reading about a shoe. You take the reader beyond reality. You have an awesome talent if you can take something so simple and transform it into a new reality.

    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by PierceMySoul | [ Reply to This ]
      whoa was all that on the shoes? honestly the metaphor is too thick for me to connect this to anny sort of footwear i've ever seen, but u chicks do be goin off on shoes tho. Ah well, its good like a descriptive writing exercise would be, altho the question would be asked as to how well the actual thing was described, albeit with good figurative language.
    | Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]

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