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    dots Submission Name: bluedots

    Author: lynn7
    ASL Info:    43/ St. Augustine, FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 419/288/103
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    time will come
    when we'll meet
    I will tell you the truth
    and the deceit

    we fly like an angel
    over this stage
    all the performers are
    well rehearsed
    for that day

    the dawn breaks
    the world anew
    you will only survive
    if you find
    your way . . . to blue

    time will stop
    only for a moment to start
    you will witness
    but will soon part

    I will meet you again
    in the sun
    to carry on with love
    and to become one

    for now your work
    is not done
    time is still here
    spread the word of love

    for he will soon be near


    Submitted on 2005-03-30 18:45:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked it.
    'you will witness
    but will soon part'
    was a little confusing. i loved your compairison to actors. keep up the writing
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Judging Angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Is this poem about god? It is a little confusing... but still good. Its being unclear leaves room for the readers imagination to take hold and finish the meaning for themeselves. If u dont mind message me back and tell me what it is about tho.. :)
    | Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey,thank you for reviewing my poem "Traitor's Moon."It is supposed to be somewhat mystical.However, it is related to the imprisoned people in the Middle Ages with the carted cages.How is anyone supposed to figure that out?Well, thank-you yet again and please write more poems.You are very talented.
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by MoonlightSonata | [ Reply to This ]

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