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    dots Submission Name: Nimbus Nothingsdots

    Author: Crutch
    ASL Info:    65/M/Ar.
    Elite Ratio:    7.58 - 44/27/12
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 1331
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       It is supposed to be a lark, a caper, a trick, but none the less serious.

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    dotsNimbus Nothingsdots

    A lavelered lackey with leaden hands
    Pileated Pythius at attention doth stand;
    Malthus, head high to face the fray
    Arrives with Lord Launfal to set the array.

    As an onslaught of obtuse objections abound
    Bold Criticus constrains the carpish crowd;
    And monophonic minions poise pointed sticks,
    At a mundane muse culling triadic tricks.

    Silhouetted shirt-tale blazoned on breeze,
    In threadbare twillings and knotted knees,
    Maecenas the malcontent sets tribute aside
    So judicious jugates can be taken in stride.

    As Freudian feelings nurture syllabic souls,
    Hippocrene hypes turn into heretic wholes.
    When Cunneiform cobwebs inundate the eyes,
    Nimbus nothings turn into fermented skie.

    Submitted on 2005-03-30 23:22:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the frequent use of alliterations; it rolls of the tongue nicely. I also like the flow of the poem, it keeps the same flow well throughout. I have no clue what it means though, sorry.

    Itís good keep writing, Linzi
    | Posted on 2006-10-11 00:00:00 | by Linzi | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like your style, and your flow. It sounds poetic, almost Shakespearean. However, like most things Shakespearean, I find this poem a bit difficult to understand. Like, I just sort of see beautiful-looking and sounding words on a screen, but I can't find the meaning in it all.
    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by Aurora-Borealis | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your tongue-twisters, the drums still beat.
    My favorites are the last two lines which seem to summate that which as been said. You properly chose the right personages to affixiate that which has been said.
    I thoroughly enjoyed the piece. One doesn't come upon such writing often. It is a draft of fresh air.
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      A rhymer, much like myself. I appreciate the rhythm and charming rhyme, as traditionalist and unpopular as the notion may be. It's the kind of easily nonsensical chatter that, in my opinion, lets the writer get away with anything he or she wishes.

    As for what it's supposed to mean, I have no clue, so for an unbiased review, I'd suggest footnotes.
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by EternitysLyre | [ Reply to This ]

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