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    dots Submission Name: Moon Dazeddots
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    Author: solitary_cross
    ASL Info:    19/female/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 92/107/24
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 633
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    dotsMoon Dazeddots
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    Mystified being
    Meant to soar
    Across the velvet sky
    Completes the canvas
    Of an artist's passion

    Your illuminating presence
    Releases hues of gray
    Capturing her soul
    As she sees your beauty
    And enlightens her within

    How she wished
    That this blinding light
    Be casted upon her
    As its gentle warmth
    Touches her solitary heart

    She looks up
    Tries to hold it
    Between her palms
    Her sight dawns upon
    This distant sphere

    Yet her fingers
    Denies to grasp it
    She realizes
    It is not meant for her
    But still she continues

    To be moon dazed by him






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      Amazingly creative way to write a love poem. Usually these poems tend to be cliché'd but this is priceless. You, obviously, have a great imagination and a deep well of ideas as well as the talent.
    | Posted on 2006-10-08 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      This was definately interesting and adventerous.
    I liked alot of your imagery, my favorite stanza was--

    "She looks up
    Tries to hold it
    Between her palms
    Her sight dawns upon
    This distant sphere"
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]
      THE DESCRPTION OF LOVE USED HERE IS SO UNIQUE AND FRESH. THE WORDS ARE PUT TOGETHER IN SUCH BEAUTIFUL FORM. THE LAST LINE IS CONSUMING. FANTASTIC JOB! :0)
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by gypsy83 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an interesting perspective on the view of love. I really enjoyed how you put this together. It was really well written, although there was something lacking in the flow. I loved how you didn't rhyme your words, and wrote from the heart. This was very well written.
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]
      I got a little confused through the poem but did enjoy it. I feel its about unrequited love...am I right? I can see your experiementing with language and that really good. Keep writing :)xoxox
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like it. The description of the poem is now one of my favorite quotes. My favorite part has to be:

    Yet her fingers
    Denies to grasp it
    She realizes
    It is not meant for her
    But still she continues

    I love that// only because I can completely relate as to how you feel. It was a little unclear in the first few lines, but you get the main idea.

    -cat <33
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by ace_in_the_hole | [ Reply to This ]


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