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    dots Submission Name: The Cemetery at Midnightdots
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    Author: C. Starr
    ASL Info:    35/yesplz/State of denial
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 130/196/68
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Written in 2002 in Winnemucca, NV across from a cememtery. it was actually far past midnight.


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    dotsThe Cemetery at Midnightdots
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    I hear the cemetery at midnight,
    The shadows of the dead dance until the light.
    Quiet whispers of insanity in my mind,
    Tortured cries of pain from the blackness outside.
    The shadows they scream hate and they worship only pain,
    I can hear them because I am the same.




    Submitted on 2005-03-31 05:14:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      actually i enjoy frequenting old graveyards at night...it's peaceful...yet exhilarating...this piece s kinda short but gets the point across...
    btw...you misspelled cemetery...

    pestiferous
    | Posted on 2005-04-03 00:00:00 | by pestiferous | [ Reply to This ]
      short yet good. i like your style put down here, reminds me of how i write sometimes. my kind of stuff. i like the end and how it rymes. because im the same, i like that line.
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      you're only saying one part of what's in a cemetary but i liked the part that you've given. As some may know, there is Yin and Yang. Where there is good and bad, where there is this and there is that and so on and. you've only said the bad part of the cemetary which gived me chills especially the shadows. Maybe, you felt really creeped out at that time but i am sure that darkness wasn't the only thing you felt. Well maybe you did. i don't know. Haven't been there with you but i think you should of expanded a bit more on those shadows stuff. Would of left chills over my spine longer...lol... Good stuff though.
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      hey
    creepy. It sent chills down my spine, especially the last sentence when you said you can hear them because you are the same.

    When you write "from the blackness outside", I get the impression you are in your home, maybe lying down, wide-awake listening to these shadows whispering and seeing them dancing in your mind.

    Though not exactly my taste, it's a well written piece!

    drika
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by silverdrika | [ Reply to This ]


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