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Submission Name: Like a butterfly dots

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Author:	mimi
ASL Info:	26/f/ny
Elite Ratio:	3.66 - 595/390/111
Words:	66

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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Like a butterfly dots

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It calls me.
to put my knees to my chin,
to warm myself,
as I did in my mother's womb.
The pillow to my chest
curl up right where I rest.
to answer the call.
I let it ring.
I stretch my hands right to the sky.
I rise.
I walk with my head held high.
I emerge like a butterfly.

Submitted on 2005-03-31 11:12:09 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i love poems about butterflies. and this is a very good one. short and very sweet.
i would like to read more on the butterfly. hope you write more!
| Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey, now there is a poem I could go back to.
I like the way it unfolds, almost like an opening in a short story or film.
And the decisions concsious or not to just remain there in that moment and let the world rush by....
That is the magic of butterflies!
| Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by arkayye | [ Reply to This ]
  this is quite simple and pretty the way you describe curling up like in the womb and then emerging as if you were coming from the cocoon. sweet.
| Posted on 2005-04-06 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
  What is hard to understand about this poem, its a simple tribute to life in a metaphor.

I really like your metaphor,using a butterfly.

It had such a light and graceful tone to it.
| Posted on 2005-04-01 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  well to be very honest i don't quite understand this fully. but the little that i did, blew me away totally. i can just see it in a very abstract way. its like a thought has been implanted inside me and its growing. beautiful is such a small word for this. this one goes to my favourites. i wish i write like this some day.

if this work of your was a fragrance, it would have been that of an orange. i don't quite know why?? top stuff!
| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by nnehriya | [ Reply to This ]
  wow, this poem is really beautiful. Short and sweet. I feel that if you made it longer that you'd be rambling, sorta like what i do sometimes in my poems, i like it just the way it is, if you don't mind i am gonna put it in my favs list too.
| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by michelle8586 | [ Reply to This ]
  great write i like the term butterfly i have read 3 or 4 versions of other peoples thought this was a good write very deep in thought i will write my version of butterfly see what you think
great readers piece you wrote
sandman
| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree with everyone, this poem is deep. And has such emotion when you read it. BRAVO. "Emerge like a butterfly" I think it's a bit short, I would have liked it if it was a bit longer. Short and sweet is good. Just not in this case. Still good.
| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Bronzebird19 | [ Reply to This ]
  I LIKED THIS POEM ALOT IT HAS A BEAUTIFUL FFELING AND MEANING TO IT. ITS A FEELING THAT WE HAVE ALL FELT COMING INTO OUR OWN SKIN, I REALLY LIKE THIS LOVELY MESSAGE. THE ONLY THING THAT THREW ME WAS THAT I FELT LIKE I WAS LEFT HANGING AT THE END IT ALMOST ENDED TO SOON OR ABRUBTLY. MAYBE ITS JUST ME LOL OTHER THEN THAT I REALLY LOVED IT! :0)
| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by gypsy83 | [ Reply to This ]
  That was very touching.

I get the feeling it's about, as you say, breaking out of the cacoon. I loved how this was put together. It flowed extremely well, and was over-all beautiful.
| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]
  This is the best poem I have read in a while on here. I love the "To answer the call.. I let it ring" that is brilliant ,deep and beautiful. I am going to add this to my Fav. and I only have two in there so you're in good company. Congrats this is an awesome poem, I am going to read the rest of your stuff now because I like this one so much.
Al
| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Al | [ Reply to This ]

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