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    dots Submission Name: In Rapturedots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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       "i will praise the Lord with my whole heart: I will tell of all Thy marvellous works." Psalm 9 vs. 1

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    dotsIn Rapturedots

    In the hours between
    midnight & twilight
    I was embraced by
    a twinkling star
    White, Red, Blue
    reflections of LOVE
    penetrated my soul
    with familiarness
    and my mind
    awoke and spread
    like the petals of
    a flower greeting
    the Son

    Submitted on 2005-03-31 11:30:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You are talented beyond
    The imagery and sheer
    beauty leaves me speechless...
    I absolutely
    love you dear heart...


    | Posted on 2005-04-03 00:00:00 | by Wynne Devereaux | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this poem is almost as conrovertial as the Terri Shiavo drama, hee-hee. I picture you waking up early in the morning and seeing a star twinkling...changing colors like they seem to do...red, white, blue...and during your meditation on it you had an EPIPHANY which inspired you to write what you wrote. I liked the whole freakin thing. You are truly gifted my dear. Thanks for the inspiration to us all and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      On my first read it just simply felt warming.. like a feel good kind of thing. The second time I thought it may have something to do with our Country (USA colors) and your pride in that.. and in waking up your mind opened to the Son in thanksgiving.
    So here's my take on it.
    God, Country, Thanksgiving, Feeling good.
    Either way, it's a good write.

    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is pure poetry Ephiphany and the usage of "son" instead of the expected "sun" works so beautifully giving honor to the Son of God in this quaint but meaningful reflection of "holy rapture." ~always with love Cheryl~
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi, you've really packed a lot into a single sentence! I loved all of your allusions, whether intended or not (son or sun, either one) I really enjoyed it. The third time I read it through, I was moved to think this was about the birth of Christ, with the timing (night) the star, the three magii (red white and blue) then the flower petals spreading signifying the birth of Christianity, with its predominant theme of love for the Son (yes, I noticed the capital S) Now, you see how much can be interpreted in a small poem?
    Very well done
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      lol ...sorry its not funny....im giggling about the ones saying incest and stuff....Umm didnt they read the description ...Anyway ...Not being a religious person myself ...I thought this was wonderful ...I didnt connect fully i guess because of the different beliefs and stuff....but still ...a really touching poem ..Good Job
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't understand why others didn't see 'Son' as refering to Jesus, I assume that is what you meant. Your poem is almost like a discription of a meditative state with which I am familier. In the eastern philosophies using the lotus flower opening as a metaphor for opening ones mind to God is quite common and a beautiful thought. This is a lovely piece and I enjoyed reading it very much. dmm
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]
      Good use of imagery and a "flowery" description. I especially enjoyed these lines:

    I was embraced by
    a twinkling star
    White, Red, Blue
    reflections of LOVE

    a good description of the sun indeed. I think there isn't any need for me to reiterate any typing errors, since my predecessoral reviewers already did. Overall, good write.
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by smily | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes I too m thinking son whould be son or I think it borders on incest lol! I love the delicate imagery.

    Favorite bit if you mean sun.
    and my mind
    awoke and spread
    like the petals of
    a flower greeting
    the Son

    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      "and my mind
    awoke and spread
    like the petals of
    a flower greeting
    the Son"

    excellent vision! only I was wondering if *son shouldn't be *sun?

    anyhoo this was a good write...short and sweet
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]

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