Description: "i will praise the Lord with my whole heart: I will tell of all Thy marvellous works." Psalm 9 vs. 1
Love, Peace, Joy!!!
Great day 2 All ; > }
In Rapture -------------------------------------------
In the hours between
midnight & twilight
I was embraced by
a twinkling star
White, Red, Blue
reflections of LOVE
penetrated my soul
with familiarness
and my mind
awoke and spread
like the petals of
a flower greeting
the Son
Wow, this poem is almost as conrovertial as the Terri Shiavo drama, hee-hee. I picture you waking up early in the morning and seeing a star twinkling...changing colors like they seem to do...red, white, blue...and during your meditation on it you had an EPIPHANY which inspired you to write what you wrote. I liked the whole freakin thing. You are truly gifted my dear. Thanks for the inspiration to us all and keep smilin' DAVE
On my first read it just simply felt warming.. like a feel good kind of thing. The second time I thought it may have something to do with our Country (USA colors) and your pride in that.. and in waking up your mind opened to the Son in thanksgiving. So here's my take on it. God, Country, Thanksgiving, Feeling good. Either way, it's a good write.
This is pure poetry Ephiphany and the usage of "son" instead of the expected "sun" works so beautifully giving honor to the Son of God in this quaint but meaningful reflection of "holy rapture." ~always with love Cheryl~
Hi, you've really packed a lot into a single sentence! I loved all of your allusions, whether intended or not (son or sun, either one) I really enjoyed it. The third time I read it through, I was moved to think this was about the birth of Christ, with the timing (night) the star, the three magii (red white and blue) then the flower petals spreading signifying the birth of Christianity, with its predominant theme of love for the Son (yes, I noticed the capital S) Now, you see how much can be interpreted in a small poem? Very well done Graeme
lol ...sorry its not funny....im giggling about the ones saying incest and stuff....Umm didnt they read the description ...Anyway ...Not being a religious person myself ...I thought this was wonderful ...I didnt connect fully i guess because of the different beliefs and stuff....but still ...a really touching poem ..Good Job
I don't understand why others didn't see 'Son' as refering to Jesus, I assume that is what you meant. Your poem is almost like a discription of a meditative state with which I am familier. In the eastern philosophies using the lotus flower opening as a metaphor for opening ones mind to God is quite common and a beautiful thought. This is a lovely piece and I enjoyed reading it very much. dmm
Good use of imagery and a "flowery" description. I especially enjoyed these lines:
I was embraced by a twinkling star White, Red, Blue reflections of LOVE
a good description of the sun indeed. I think there isn't any need for me to reiterate any typing errors, since my predecessoral reviewers already did. Overall, good write.
Submission Name: In Rapture
