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Author: kittycampbel
ASL Info:    23 male uganda
Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 53 /72 /25
Words: 98
Class/Type: Prose /Longing
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just advisory to a young peer in school


Here ends the season;as well
Here comes the reason;why you're here
Arise ye academic warrior
Hast thou broken thine chains
Hast thou shaken off the shackles of failure
Purge thineself now with unflinching determination
Forget everything contrary except
The Lover of your soul
Yes it is God,who stands by a hardworker
Cast every of your anxieties to him
During these hard times so full of care
May you sour to great hieghts in success
Die a little hard because remember;
success is for the vigilant and not
For the Idle ones
A season's success I wish thee!

Submitted on 2005-03-31 11:36:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  gwe, u can really make someone wake up and read books. this is totally fresh coz i have never heeard of a poem about education(maybe its coz i do not read a lot-hehehe) but this is nice, lots a rhymes,and rhythm-its cool.
| Posted on 2005-04-03 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]
  I found this to be very inspirational and encouraging. Wish I'd had someone like you when I was in school, to encourage and urge me onward. I admire your faith in God, and your love for life... And as always, you have a way of warming my heart when I read your writings. This one is very good!

Take Care!
| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi, I'm not exactly going to be reviewing your poem, rather I just wanted to seize the opportunity and say hello to you and other fellows from Uganda, as well as the African people. It's quite a surprise, and a good one, to find African writers here at Eliteskills. Keep writing, keep posting, we sure would like to see more from your side of the world. It's good to know eliteskills is getting multi-cultural.
| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by smily | [ Reply to This ]

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