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Author: Podenco del infierno
ASL Info:    19/M/Ohio
Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 205 /195 /38
Words: 129
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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This is about someone, not me just being creative. It is about how someone takes over you and how you love them, yet hate them at the same time...I don't think that this is too good, I would like to hear what you think of it...Enjoy...


I hate you.
Why are you here?
Won't you just go away.
Leave me alone!

My forever hated one,
Are killing me.
The one I eternally love,
Are a ghost,
Forever haunting me.

Even though I hate you
Because you suck the life out of me,
I still love you.
And even though I love you,
I want you to go away.
I do not need your help.
Leave me alone.

Everytime my eyes close,
Your face apears in darkness.
Your spirit stalks me.
I hear your voice in my head,
Trying to save me.
I try not to listen,
But it is too loud.

Why must you care?

I am forever haunted by you...
My eternally cherished one.

Submitted on 2005-03-31 15:29:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a good poem. Well written and expressed! I can understand the love/hate thing too! I mean I really don't understand how it is possible to love and hate the same person at the same time, but I have and I can relate! Maybe you really don't want them to go away? Maybe you just are afraid of your feelings? Maybe you fear that love with be a weakness? I really don't believe you want to be alone! I don't think anyone really wants to be alone. Maybe you are just afraid of being hurt? Anyway, this is a good poem. Glad I read it! Take care and have a
| Posted on 2005-07-17 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  great work nathan, you have to tell me who this is, Jessica?, Jessica H.?, Stephanie?...when i read this i couldn't tell who it was about, it seemed like i could have been about anyone which is one of the good things about it (everyone can relate to this)...the wording and flow are excellent...i can really feel your mixed emotions when i read this...keep up the great work
| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by morte | [ Reply to This ]
  wow this sounds like someone i know...she loves someone even though they hurt her over and over and she wishes she would stop loving him but she cant... i also disagree with DeathWish because alot of people i know can relate to this kind of topic and you wrote it so well that i could even feel the pain you are trying to possess in this for improvement i see none so congrats on such a well written piece

| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by withouthope | [ Reply to This ]
  I disagree with the previous comment I loved this as a hit a very personal note for me. I have no suggestions as to what can be improved I enjoyed it just as is...

It's F*cked up how fate can be huh?
| Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]

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