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    dots Submission Name: The Lovers Dancedots
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    Author: PookiezBookie
    ASL Info:    16/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 103/129/49
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 984
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 888



    Description:
       Thinking about how we dance across the floor at prom. something that a girl can never forget.


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    dotsThe Lovers Dancedots
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    It starts with a look that tells me you want it.
    Slowly turning into a song.
    You touch my hand as they become one, still starring deep into my eyes.
    Our feet move to a rythm that our tender hearts beat and our chests fill up with sighs.
    Our lips mirror the motion that hands do when they pray.
    Rubbing cheek to cheek as we dance the night away.
    Your hands move across my body like the air does to the land.
    All to come back to touch and slowly grip my hand.
    You whisper the words that let me know your mine and I will always be yours.
    We dance on air and drift off on the skeptors gaze.
    Our trail leaving a leathery lace that constricts into a maze.
    This is the ritual that lovers perform no matter the time or the place.
    Where we prance in a trance and make no mistakes.
    This is the lovers dance.




    Submitted on 2005-03-31 18:08:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yah i like it, i'll make this short by telling you this is going on my fav.

    to easy ofcourse, this site is makeing me write more than just a comment, so ill tell you what i think to make them happy. i liked the words you used and the flow. it seemed real positive and in a way kindof suductive in a way i can't explaine, i guess because it's so real that the evil dark part of love shows itself if you understand it well enough. my faverite part was whan you wrote,
    Our trail leaving a leathery lace that constricts into a maze.
    This is the ritual that lovers perform no matter the time or the place.
    that was deep and artisticly poetic. keep up your good writing.
    | Posted on 2005-04-02 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      hey this was a decent poem I like all the imagery used in it. It made me feel like I was slapping someone in the face...wait no I WAS slapping someone in the face but you're poem was really good no joke.
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by JD_Heckle | [ Reply to This ]


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