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    dots Submission Name: truth is beauty, so are liesdots
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    Author: charmedidentity
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    6.9 - 864/897/406
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       This is based on a quote i once read about the truth and the lies. That truth is a beautiful thing, but a lie is the same since it is disguised as the truth but it's just the person telling the lie knows it is a lie instead of the truth and the person that knows not the lie will take it as the truth.


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    The truth is a beautiful thing but so are lies,
    It does the same to you; give you butterflies.
    The only difference being between those two,
    Is to know what can be set as the best of value.
    The only way to know what can apply to you,
    Is to recognize what can be pulled through.
    The truth is a beautiful thing but so are lies,
    You do not know the truth by the look of eyes.

    Lies are the deceptions of a faithful truth,
    It stays with you either maturity or youth.
    Lies are the inevitable world of a reality,
    Being your friend with the end of an enemy.
    Lies will always be part of your journey,
    Yet will never stay as something of safety.
    Lies are being created from the tip of a root,
    And this deceit is being grown into a fruit.

    Truth is the sincerity of what you feel inside,
    It is everything that is pure for your guide.
    Truth will bring you to a place of freedom,
    And you will rise again from the bottom.
    Truth will always bring to you its welcome,
    No longer will you sense having a problem.
    Truth is beauty yet lies have the same pride,
    It all depends on the feelings we decide.





    Submitted on 2005-04-01 08:04:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well, that is an amazing subject indeed, I really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really loved the subject!

    I read this one based on your recomendation and I'm so glad that I read it beacuse it really worth being read!

    Where do I begin?! Well, let me begin from the begining, from the title, I think that the title is very well chosen and totally suits the poem and the way it was written and it totally captures the attention of any reader (It captured mine)! And after the very well chosen title there is the very very very very very very very very very very very very very very very very very well written description! As I don't think that someone could read such a description and not continue to read the poem! I just can't imagine that!

    The quote that you mentioned is a very good one and very true too!

    And now about the poem itself; unfortunately I didn't like the poem as much as I liked the subject, title or even description! And that is weird of course but that is what I see, I see an amazing topic and an amazing title and a perfect description and then a normal poem! I just wished it could be like the rest to complete the picture! But that doesn't mean it is a bad because it isn't, I just wanted more!

    Eventhough it was so organized in three equal stanzas but the rhyme and the flow was forced at the most part and that took alot from the beauty of it!

    I liked the line that says;

    "Lies are the deceptions of a faithful truth"

    And also the line that says;

    "Truth is the sincerity of what you feel inside"

    Those were my favorite lines in the poem, and I think that they cover the main idea of the poem too.

    One last thing is in the last line in the first stanza, that says;

    "You do not know the truth by the look of eyes"

    And I don't really agree with that line! There's a famous quote that says;

    "Eyes never lie", and that is what I believe!

    Anyway, I hope that I gave you a helpful and a useful comment and I'll end up as usual saying good luck and keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by Yousef | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this poem. I hate lies because I've been lied too so many times it's hard to trust anyone. I'd rather have the bad truth than a good lie. Anyways good stuff. I enjoyed reading this poem.
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by musclebound350 | [ Reply to This ]
      may i say WOW this is good I do like the comparrison you make and i can relate with whut you are saying...its very wel written and it flows ...i like that in poems makes it easier to read so keep writing!-martinimadelvr
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by MartiniMadeLvr | [ Reply to This ]
      again this is good. i wont make this comment to long this time so don't worry. this is just as impressing as your others. i think you deserve to called one of the best writters here, along with pookiezbookie, Kristina9178,C. Starr, pinurplepassion, and myself jermwerm.these writters should read all your poems and you should read theirs, just keep it up cause you just got a new stalker.
    | Posted on 2005-04-10 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I love how this is written. SO pure...So true. I like the way that you started out talking about both lies and truth in one stanza and then you went on to talk about lies and truth in their own stanzas, expanding on the meaning a little more. I like the way you take something that is seemingly so simple and make it so beautiful.

    You are an amzing writer and i cant wait to read some of your other pieces..
    | Posted on 2005-04-05 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]


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