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    dots Submission Name: To My Stepmotherdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       To my Step-mother who did her damdest to silence me!


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    dotsTo My Stepmotherdots
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    Silence is golden.

    You have the right to remain silent.

    Children should be seen and not heard...
    And maybe children should be invisible too.

    For all the years my lips were sealed in a pasting of gluey fear.
    For all the times you made my self expressions void and queer.
    For all the times you professed my guilt and executed punishment.
    For all the rivers you made flow in decadence.
    For all the hurts that were left unhugged.
    For all the love that you returned to sender; unopened.
    For all the soul-stripping glares.
    For all the heart-stopping footfalls on the stairs.
    For the boil-in-the bag bathtimes.
    For blowtorching that barnet of mine.
    For all the times I cried, distraught.
    For breaking my spirit, or so you thought.
    For stealing my identity, a little each day.
    For getting me lost in your crazy maze.
    For all the wounding daggers you spat.
    For all the words that stabbed my heart.

    I NOW STAND TALL AND STATE MY RESOUNDING CLAIM,

    "I HAVE THE RIGHT TO FREEDOM OF SPEECH"
    "I HAVE THE RIGHT TO FREEDOM OF ERESSION"
    "I HAVE THE RIGHT TO BE FREE"
    "AND GOD WOMAN, I SWEAR,
    I SURE AS HELL HAVE THE RIGHT TO BE ME!"

    I forgive you!




    Submitted on 2005-04-01 08:27:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, The energy in the end was amazing. When you added the caps lock all the emotion sprung out and the anger seem to hit the roof. This poem is amazing, I am sorry about your stepmother, I was fortunate to have a loving one but I am very glad you came out to be a good person.
    | Posted on 2005-05-07 00:00:00 | by pvt.ackerson | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel connected to this poem, I have a stepmother too, she wasn't the greatest but in my adult life she has changed maybe she never will apologize for the wrongs committed but her changing was like an apology in a way. I like that line especially "For all the love that you returned to sender; unopened" it grabbed me.
    and in the end you forgive, it was touching and heart wrenching at the same time, mike :)
    | Posted on 2005-06-11 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      THIS WAS GOOD I HOPE THE PERSON BEHIND THIS WILL GET TO VIEW IT TOUGH LIFE EIERENCE SEEMS LIKE THAT HAPPENS ALOT IN LIFE I HAVE ALSO EERIENCED THIS BUT HAVE NEVER WROTE ABOUT IT I GUESS SOMETHINGS ARE BETTER KEPT IN SILENCE ON MY BEHALF AS RAGE CAN REALLY SEND PEOPLE IN A SPIN NICE WRITE HOPE YOU FEEL BETTER
    SANDMAN
    | Posted on 2005-04-01 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Im gald you know how you feel, and its pitiful that your mother, *uhhum* your stepmother would try to do what she is doing, my stepmother is the same way... anyways your poem is great it could use a little work on the details and maybe expressing your thoughts in a more peotice form. but that my opionon and other than that i think it is a good write. Great job Keep Writing.
    RandiKae
    | Posted on 2005-04-01 00:00:00 | by RandiKae | [ Reply to This ]


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