Description: I really wanted to change a certain guy's perception of me. he always told me i'm pretty and sweet . . . I HATE IT coz being sweet is making him move slooooooooowly!!!!!
if you can relate plz comment; if you think it's silly plz comment; if you reading this comment plzzzzzzz read the poem and DON"T FORGET TO . . . . . . . COMMENT!!! Thanx;0)
I'M SEXY - not sweet!! -------------------------------------------
DON'T TREAT ME GENTLY!
DON'T TREAT ME SWEET!
I want you to ride me
Not rub my feet
DON'T TELL ME YOU ADORE ME!
DON'T TELL ME I'M CUTE!
I want to hear that I'm real sexy and hot
And that you'll consider yourself lucky if you got a shot
STOP BEING A GENTLEMEN!
STOP BEING SO SLOW!
For once I want to get physical with you
And just let everything go
Honey, I know what you mean. These boys/men running around opening doors and cuddling and pecks on the cheek but after a while you ready to get it poppin'. What's the hold up! Good, no correction great poem ~Rene'~
OMG .. hey .. can we go out?? just kidding i like .. i hope one day my girlfriend says so to me because i am too slow and i realized that so a good write.. just the use of capital letters.. may be shocking .. for me... so keep writing and hope you can keep readinga nd commenting my stuff soon take care peace and lvoe and have a nice day
Wow! This is really hot stuff! Nice write! You just get right to the point, no nonsense! I like that! Sometimes ya gotta be direct and to the point! Well most of the time..Haha! I hear ya on the sweet stuff! Sexy is a better word I will agree. Sweet is like some school girl sh*t ya know! This is quite the poem! Nice work here! Take care!
Hell I can relate! I want every girl to be at me like that, [censored]! Why we gotta make the move all the time? I be wanting to get takien advantage of too! LOL This was good though! I like how you used the case differenetial to substantiate the difference in you telling him WHAT NOT TO DO and you being sexy. Very entertaining....
ha well, again i can relate. my last boyfriend was very sweet, but he just didnt have the heat that the one before did. the only suggestions i have are
[[I want to hear that I'm real sexy and hot]] maybe try eliminating the "that". it sounded too long.
[[For once I want to get physical with you]] this rhythm was off, but i dont know what to tell you. maybe just eliminate the "with you"....im not sure
otherwise, very earnest feeling here, even if a bit horny haha. they can be frustrating, but sometimes the sweet ones turn out to be the best in the long run, not the ones who just want a piece of ass. but its all about preferance :) sophie
DON'T TREAT ME GENTLY! DON'T TREAT ME SWEET! I want you to ride me Not rub my feet
I loved that the most...
But, there is lots of meanings to sexy.. I mean you can feel sexy and not be sexy. You can look sexy without feeling it.. Its really hard to describe. I wish I was sexy.. Maybe some people think I am.. who knows? Its really what you feel, and if he doesn't feel the same way. You shouldn't let him get to you, by if you are or aren't sexy.. Personality counts the most..
Have you ever heard of Degrassi, the series. You sound like Mannie off of it. And I applaud you for the write. But do you really wanna be sexy and hott? I never thought I would actually hear someone write something liek this, but I htink I'll put it in my favs cuz it;s different. I can relarte in a way. Yes, sometimes I really do wish I were more sexy, but I guess we all wonder...
*Sigh* ...You wanted me to comment if i relate ..So i am ..And i do lol ..I broke up with my fiance' over something like that ...It seems like a trivial thing to break up over i know ...But urgh ..It damned near killed me ...He didnt have a strong bone in his body ...He was the same guy who told me a woman should never umm...*blush* ..go done on a guy ..because its demeaning ...I was like "Shit ...I dont care!!" lol ...I laughed at this ..it was a good write ..i laughed because it was so innocently written ..but i can taste the frustration There's a little hornbag in every male ...the trick is dragging it out ...And thats only if you think its worth the trouble .... ...Well done ..Blessed Be ...
well you definatly had the words, but not the emotion, you would'nt be able to call this silly if you had put some strong, sexy ,horny, lingering emotional twists in it. If you revise this and not just give us this raw pg rated version of your iterests let me know, this could be really good if you got it to be r rated. Kacey
well, that was different. i have never read anything about someone wanting sex. it just sounds to me like you are horny and want this person.
i am sure that this person is slow for a reason. maybe he is scared, or maybe he loves you and doesn't want to hurt you or himself by rushing into things too quickly. it sounds to me that if this person can respect you, and you can't respect him for what he his doing, then you two shouldn't be together. i say that in the nicest way possible. but if this guy is scared, then you shouldn't be rushing things. and like i said, if you can't respect him back, you shouldn't be togther. think about it.
as for the poem, it is full of feeling and emotion, and you did a great job expressing yourself, but i didn't like the idea behind it, really...well hope you can straighten this issue out.
I like this boldashish (is that a word? lol) poem Africanprincess but know in my heart that you are holding back with it. Come on you can do it lol take this fragment of your true imagination and truly explode! ~always with love Cheryl~
I can definitely relate. I've been with this guy for a year now and am 6 months pregnant with his baby and he still acts like I'm too sweet to be real with. I like how you you included the part about being a gentleman. With my bf, that is the one thing he can't get past. He has no clue about how to be real and show his true needs, he always worries about being gentle and kind to me. It's so frustrating when you can't get a man to just be rough and take control like a real man, I think you can agree with that, right!?
I don't know if the rhyming was accidental or on purpose, but I see that your scheme could use a little work. In the first stanza 1 and 3 rhyme and so do 2 and 4; but in the second stanza only 3 and 4 rhyme. In the last stanza only 2 and 4 rhyme. Maybe if you changed it around a little and made it more consistent with the rhyming pattern it could be better.
I am in no way an expert, this is just my opinion, so don't take offense, please!
girl, the props go to you! you are so assertive and bold. i can completely relate to this one. i'm the kind of girl that's never seen as sexy or hot. i guess guys see me more as the cute, sweet, girl next door type. i may seem like a little goody-two-shoes on the outside at times, but that's not at all who i am! guys need to realize our needs and wants. it always seems to just float right past them. anyway, great write. keep your chin up, and you'll get what you want! ^_^