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    dots Submission Name: Its Always YOUdots
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    Author: brokensmile
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 241/326/148
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 878
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       idk- its not one of my best... but givme ur feedback. negatives fine, if this poem dosent capture your attention its ok- it dosnt capture mine either.


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    dotsIts Always YOUdots
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    Dazed
    still staring out clear cut glass
    to the fog of a monday morning
    theres people passing by
    and the loud cry of traffic lights
    but all i see is you
    imagining your face
    as it was the day before
    then the clouds broke down on me
    and the sky began to pour

    Me? im just passing through
    walking along the storm
    steady currents of lonely thoughts
    pounding the pavement
    pulling me away from the norm
    im swept beside myself
    entirely consumed
    by the feeling of you
    just wanted to let you know
    its you
    its always you

    hurricanes will come
    ripping up my life of unconsciousness
    earthquakes could make this city crumble
    a tornado will one day twist and tumble
    through what i thought was meaningful and true
    but all i see
    all ill ever need
    is you and only you.





    Submitted on 2005-04-02 20:35:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I LOVE THIS POEM! i don't know what it is but i really truly love this poem! you have talent! flaunt it:P haha...omg this poem is awsum! there really isn't any critisism!

    AWSOM JOB!

    -Melanie
    | Posted on 2005-04-10 00:00:00 | by _Beautiful_Lie_ | [ Reply to This ]
      in love?! it makes such do the craziest thing..like writing this poem for a monday morning. But, been there. Exactly know how you feel. Keep writing :) goodluck.

    "Me? im just passing through
    walking along the storm
    steady currents of lonely thoughts
    pounding the pavement
    pulling me away from the norm
    im swept beside myself
    entirely consumed
    by the feeling of you
    just wanted to let you know
    its you
    its always you

    hurricanes will come
    ripping up my life of unconsciousness
    earthquakes could make this city crumble
    a tornado will one day twist and tumble
    through what i thought was meaningful and true
    but all i see
    all ill ever need
    is you and only you."

    ...liked the way you have expressed feelings from both sides. I was sad reading this. Good work.
    | Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]


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